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The Mike Sacks Member
since 1999-08-29
Posts 129brooklyn ny 
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I saw you in my dream before its makes me wanna sleep forever an enteral life of watching you me and you, always together Just to see you smile and laugh again i would give my life away to dream of you from another place every night and day You have made the biggest change in me i have ever seen before But as i look into you eyes so brown knowing your heart is pure i know this change i feel can only be for good B/c your the one who changed me the only one who could. today i search my mind thinking of what to do finding my self left thoughtless b/c all that was there was you every thought that crossed my mind contained your smiling face that face that stops the time in everything and place i have no ending to this thank you nothing i can find since the only thing there is you the one thing on my mind One day I will be famous and all the people who were ever my friends will have me by there side when ever they need me to be there. And all the people who are there talking behind my back an saying stuff bout me,and they will never see me again,and to all again this is wat i have to say "Yeah, now I'm big and important One angry dwarf and 200 solemn faces are you If you really want to see me check the papers and the TV Look who's telling who what to do Kiss my *** goodbye" |
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poetry_kills Senior Member
since 1999-12-04
Posts 549new orleans |
mike: this is beautiful... one of your best i'd say  i hope the one you wrote this for appreciated it... i know it deserves appreciation...sincerely, jerome the mysterious priest A savage place! as holy and enchanted As e'er beneath a waning moon was haunted By woman wailing for her demon-lover! ~Coleridge |
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The Mike Sacks Member
since 1999-08-29
Posts 129brooklyn ny |
thanx lots  |
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The Mike Sacks Member
since 1999-08-29
Posts 129brooklyn ny |
cant let this die out |
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Mistikman Senior Member
since 2000-01-10
Posts 682San Jose, CA, USA |
Sorry for not catching and responding to thie earlier Mike, dividing my time between teen and open has me burning the candle at both ends and it is hard to read everything Nice work, your girlfriend is lucky to have someone like you, and you are lucky to have her. I am not a poet, I am merely one who speaks in emotion |
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Majestic Member
since 2000-01-11
Posts 264houston, tx. |
excellent...loved it...all gooey and mushy..hehe...great job.. "To live is to love; To truly LOVE is to live!" ~kg~ |
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Cuddlez Member
since 1999-11-27
Posts 422Walla Walla, WA 99362 |
Very good poem. Not often I see a guys poetry phrased exactly in that way. Good job. |
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rich-pa Member
since 2000-02-07
Posts 317New Orleans, Louisiana |
dig it yo, i'm glas to see more guys writng poetry myself, as a guy i see it as an accomplishment for us. to tell the truth i didn't pay attention to who wrote it at first and just assumed a girl was writing it, keep up the good work rich-pa |
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The Mike Sacks Member
since 1999-08-29
Posts 129brooklyn ny |
Thank you all,and i agree its a step up to find guys other then my self who write poetry,I personally wish there was a way for the girl i wrote it about to be my g/f,The girl in the pic is not my current g/f,currently im single.I met this girl about 3 months back doesnt fit the standards i knew my self to have,for example shes not <5"6+. brown,black hair.blue or green eyes...size 2-5 waist,34 b/c cup> that was my taste and enver before was i attracted to anyone who didnt fit it,but this girl had this smile that caught me across the room,a room with over 600 people in it.....so shes all i can write about whihc is a slight problme for me as i continue on my journey to write the last 6 of 12 songs to put on my bands punk rock cd. Thank you for reading my story Mike |
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The Mike Sacks Member
since 1999-08-29
Posts 129brooklyn ny |
Thank you all,and i agree its a step up to find guys other then my self who write poetry,I personally wish there was a way for the girl i wrote it about to be my g/f,The girl in the pic is not my current g/f,currently im single.I met this girl about 3 months back doesnt fit the standards i knew my self to have,for example shes not <5"6+. brown,black hair.blue or green eyes...size 2-5 waist,34 b/c cup> that was my taste and enver before was i attracted to anyone who didnt fit it,but this girl had this smile that caught me across the room,a room with over 600 people in it.....so shes all i can write about whihc is a slight problme for me as i continue on my journey to write the last 6 of 12 songs to put on my bands punk rock cd. Thank you for reading my story Mike |
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angel6917 Member
since 2000-01-14
Posts 478WI |
Mike: It's so sweet that you can write about a girl like that. It feels weird, doesn't it, that someone who isn't usually your type is someone you can't get out of your mind? I met a guy who is NOTHING like what I usually go for, but like you, I can't get him out of my head. A lot of my poetry now is about him, too. ~Kristi Lynn "Why does no one sees how hard I cry?" -Me |
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poetry_kills Senior Member
since 1999-12-04
Posts 549new orleans |
sorry mike... had to delete your other post concerning this poem as it was not appropriate for this forum... sincerely, jerome the mysterious priest A savage place! as holy and enchanted As e'er beneath a waning moon was haunted By woman wailing for her demon-lover! ~Coleridge |
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The Mike Sacks Member
since 1999-08-29
Posts 129brooklyn ny |
its ok jerome,im sorry bout the double post above,deltet it if u can. but thank you all for everything,u people have made my writing much better and have helped it mature of the past 8 months |
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