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A Natural High |
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Nights Member
since 2000-01-03
Posts 56 |
God, please don't take offense But i need to know the answer Of what’s been on my mind You've seen me down before And you've helped me up But i can't contain this feeling I need to break this bottle And let the entrapped run free This rush is a natural high One which brings color to my cheeks Puts a smile on my face I need you behind me in this Supporting the choice i've made To see me rise above I may seem ill to some Like a disease spreading in me With little medication in sight God... please don't take offense "It's my heart that pounds beneath my flesh it's my mouth that pushes out this breath..."-FTE |
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poetry_kills Senior Member
since 1999-12-04
Posts 549new orleans |
nights: this is definately intriguing... might i be so bold to ask what this thing in the bottle is? this thing that you fear God will take offense to?... you dont have to tell me if you'd prefer not to divulge... i do think this is a good poem (although shrouded in mystery as it is, it's hard for me to interpret)... sincerely, jerome the boy with no brain A savage place! as holy and enchanted As e'er beneath a waning moon was haunted By woman wailing for her demon-lover! ~Coleridge |
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Jer Member
since 1999-12-02
Posts 443USA |
YES! This was WONDERFUL! I just wrote one very simmiler to this and I know what you speak of. I must say GREAT JOB! |
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