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We'll put the clocks into reverse
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We'll put the clocks into reverse |
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Master Senior Member
since 1999-08-18
Posts 1867Boston, MA 
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The window leaned against the moon To me, today has made no sense The clocks were running on their hands They brought black holes into my room Tomorrow I will be all right Tomorrow may not come so soon The bright illusion of the moon Will slowly fade into the night For all the worst and for the better I’ll find you beneath my skin You will eternally glow within This way we’ll always be together And I shall write another verse Before this night comes to an end If I could only hold your hand We’d put the clocks into reverse The pale moon would shrink in size The sun would once again appear I would wake up and you’d be near The night would melt inside our eyes |
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hoppy Member
since 2000-01-27
Posts 271 |
very nice indeed!! very vivid imagery, i could almost see it happening. Mark of a truely good writter! "If there is anything the nonconformist hates worse than a conformist it's another nonconformist who doesn't conform to the prevailing standards of nonconformity." SUBMIT YOUR POETRY HERE, AWSOME PAGE. http://members.xoom.com/weeklyhoppy |
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poetry_kills Senior Member
since 1999-12-04
Posts 549new orleans |
master: this is absolutely beautiful... the surrealistic imagery is superb and the clincher lines at the end are wonderful... i really like the first and title lines a lot... sincerely, jerome the boy with no brain A savage place! as holy and enchanted As e'er beneath a waning moon was haunted By woman wailing for her demon-lover! ~Coleridge |
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Astraea Member
since 1999-11-09
Posts 378California! Yeah! Okay, I'm done now |
What can I say that hasn't already been said or that you don't already know? Wonderfully lovely poem. The lines are absolutely beautiful, not to mention touching something inside. Superb writing. ~Astraea "Sometimes stars can only be seen in darkness." "Sorrow's crown of sorrow is remembering happier things." |
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Master Senior Member
since 1999-08-18
Posts 1867Boston, MA |
Thank you all for your kind replies. I know that a poem is good when people say that it "touched" them. Thank you |
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sweetcollege_girl Senior Member
since 1999-12-03
Posts 872just about where I want to be |
Well master, you can say it again...this piece totally left me speechless! I loved it!  "Superiority to fate is difficult to learn. 'Tis not conferred by any, but possible to earn"--Emily Dickinson-"Superiority of Fate" |
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Master Senior Member
since 1999-08-18
Posts 1867Boston, MA |
Speechless means that I succeeded, Thanks! |
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Jer Member
since 1999-12-02
Posts 443USA |
Great job Master. You truly live up to your name! |
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Master Senior Member
since 1999-08-18
Posts 1867Boston, MA |
As many times as I've heard that one, I still feel honored! Thank you! |
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