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KiKi Junior Member
since 2000-01-30
Posts 15 |
What was Expected... You always did what was expected You never lived your life for yourself Is that really what you predicted You just put aside your problems on a shelf You need to look deep inside yourself To find out who you really are Not just try to hidr yourself To be what is expected You need to have controll To know what you want to do you need to fend for yourself Not wait around for other people Not only should you learn all this But learn to know yourself And not have to talk to talk into this mirror *if you love someone let them go, if they return their love was yours, if they don't their love wa never yours to begin with* |
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poetry_kills Senior Member
since 1999-12-04
Posts 549new orleans |
kiki: i like this one quite a bit (better than the other one you posted, i must admit)... i like the twist at the end most of all... though i do think you should put some sort of punctuation (a dash perhaps) after the next to last line to seperate what is coming from what was before... i hope to read more of your poetry soon... sincerely, jerome the boy with no brain A savage place! as holy and enchanted As e'er beneath a waning moon was haunted By woman wailing for her demon-lover! ~Coleridge |
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hoppy Member
since 2000-01-27
Posts 271 |
nice poem, i like the way you used the wording, very nice |
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