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Intellectual intercourse (adult content-- mature readers only!!!)
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Intellectual intercourse (adult content-- mature readers only!!!) |
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Master Senior Member
since 1999-08-18
Posts 1867Boston, MA 
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I think that I am now obssessed While finding love, I’m losing sleep. I rub my words against her chest I touch her heart and pinch its tip. She grips my mind with her tongue And licks my conscience all around. From all this joy, a poem sprung And I just could not keep it down. This quick-- I never thought to be And ink is dripping on her thighs. She leans on forward, kisses me-- This Muse has got me hypnotized! [This message has been edited by Master (edited 01-30-2000).] |
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Master Senior Member
since 1999-08-18
Posts 1867Boston, MA |
I've made some minor changes to this one, think it's better this way. |
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Marilyn Member Elite
since 1999-09-26
Posts 2621Ontario, Canada |
This is great Master. I was a bit worried when I read the title. You managed to write something very erotic without crossing any lines. Bravo!! |
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Master Senior Member
since 1999-08-18
Posts 1867Boston, MA |
Thank you Marilyn, I would post this in the Adult forum, but I'm not allowed in there yet! (smile) |
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Marilyn Member Elite
since 1999-09-26
Posts 2621Ontario, Canada |
<font face="Arial, Arial, Verdana" color="#871f78" size="2">Well young man...when you are finally allowed to post there I am sure you will blow their minds (and mine I am sure). To be honest with you I do not go there often. I have only ever posted twice there myself. I think it is more of a challange because you are not allowed in...lol.</font> [This message has been edited by Marilyn (edited 01-31-2000).] |
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poetry_kills Senior Member
since 1999-12-04
Posts 549new orleans |
master: this is a very very good poem... i have to admit, however, that being the naive fool that i am, i saw this poem as one about the inspiration of writing poetry with love-making as a metaphor to carry the ideas... i guess i'm missing some of the "dirt" in the poem... but then, as i said previously, i've always been naive... either way this is a wonderful work... sincerely, jerome the boy with no brain A savage place! as holy and enchanted As e'er beneath a waning moon was haunted By woman wailing for her demon-lover! ~Coleridge |
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chic Member
since 2000-01-26
Posts 245yellville, Ar, U.S. |
this is a great poem master...and u have really lived up to ur name   !!!!!!! |
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Master Senior Member
since 1999-08-18
Posts 1867Boston, MA |
Thank u both! |
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Jer Member
since 1999-12-02
Posts 443USA |
All I can say is WOW! You have shown some great writing skills myfriend! |
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Master Senior Member
since 1999-08-18
Posts 1867Boston, MA |
Thank you Jer! Glad you liked it! |
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