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WhtDove
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0 posted 1999-10-19 03:52 PM


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The screams I heard on Halloween
Made me a nervous wreck.
The shreiks came out so eerily
The hair stood on my neck.

For two years straight I've heard that sound
That stood my hair on end.
And, when I walked home late tonight
I heard it once again.

Real scared, I stopped and looked around
There's nothing I could see.
A cold chill then ran up my spine
There's something touching me.

I froze there for a moment, then
I quickly spun around.
My knees were shaking terribly
My voice would make no sound.

I felt a cold and clammy hand
Brush up against my face.
But when I looked into the eyes
There was a vacant space.

Two gaping holes where eyes once were
My blood froze in my veins.
That's when I got a real good look
At what's called Long John's brains.

There was this green slime oozing out
And dripping through his eyes.
Those eerie shreiks I heard that night
Were Long John's pitiful cries.

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Toerag
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Ala bam a
1 posted 1999-10-19 03:58 PM


Nice job there Dove....but yanno, he does have terrible sinus problems also....that may not have been slime?.....But he is scarey..that's a sure thing!
Watcher666
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2 posted 1999-10-19 04:27 PM


LOL.....too cute!

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Systematic Decay
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That place with padded walls and funny people in white.........
3 posted 1999-10-19 04:32 PM


LOL, I'll be sure not to walk outside at night alone anymore.

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Poet deVine
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Hurricane Alley
4 posted 1999-10-19 05:35 PM


LOVE it! You did a good job on both the graphics and the poem!!!

WhtDove
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5 posted 1999-10-19 05:36 PM


Thanks all for your replies!

Toe, it didn't start out that way, just how it seemed to end. Poor guy that LJ!! LOL
I thought about adding something like that in, but just couldn't make it fit. LOL

WhtDove
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6 posted 1999-10-19 05:40 PM


Thank you very much PdV that means a lot! You snuck in here on me! I thought I was gonna scream at what I went through to get these graphics in here I tell ya! Oh no, that was LJ, I forgot! LOL...

Toe, Watcher, S.D I thank you all!

Munda
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7 posted 1999-10-19 05:56 PM


LOL I loved it Wthdove, ALL of it ! : )
Dark Angel
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8 posted 1999-10-19 06:19 PM


This is terrific WhtDove, enjoyed the read

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What comes from the heart goes to the heart.
Samuel Coleridge



Marilyn
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9 posted 1999-10-19 06:51 PM


Wonderfully done WhtDove. Your talent always amazes me.
Balladeer
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10 posted 1999-10-19 08:58 PM


Gee, LongJohn, even the doves call ya green slime. I've always considered you a wonderful person myself. Scary, sure, but with style.

Good poem, Dove...and a brilliant expose.

WhtDove
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11 posted 1999-10-19 09:00 PM


Thanks so much Munda.

D.A. thanks girl! Glad you enjoyed it!

Marilyn, that's quite the compliment! Thank you very much!

WhtDove
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12 posted 1999-10-19 09:01 PM


Balladeer you snuck in on me too!
Thanks, for that means a lot coming from you buddy!

Denise
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13 posted 1999-10-19 09:40 PM


Great! I wasn't expecting to end like that!

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Echo Rhayne
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14 posted 1999-10-19 10:09 PM


I see after all the trouble you had, you finally got it to work. Well worth the trouble I think! Great poem! I love it LoL...though are you sure it wasn't me J/K


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WhtDove
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15 posted 1999-10-20 07:08 AM


Denise thank you! I thought I'd give a shot at something I don't normally do. Glad you enjoyed it.

Echo, thank you for your sweet compliment. I'm sure it wasn't you Hon! LOL

RainbowGirl
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16 posted 1999-10-20 07:15 AM


Poor LJA...but thanks for the laughter..

HUGS

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hoot_owl_rn
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17 posted 1999-10-20 04:41 PM


Whtdove....finally glad to see this thing come together for you. Nice job.....good for a laugh, or two
PhaerieChild
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18 posted 1999-10-20 06:07 PM


Loved the surprise ending...love anything that brings a smile and graphics were great too.

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Christopher
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Purgatorial Incarceration
19 posted 1999-10-20 06:30 PM


ROFL!!
Good one Dove!
It flowed easily, and even had a twist on the end!

Martie
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20 posted 1999-10-20 06:39 PM


Great time for goolies and things that go bump in the night. I enjoyed this alot.
Soleil
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21 posted 1999-10-20 08:13 PM


Boo to you, too.
WhtDove
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22 posted 1999-10-20 10:41 PM


Rainbow I agree, poor LJA. I was gonna use Toe but I just couldn't! LOL...naw, really it just ended up that way, I was gonna do a serious one.

Thanks Hoot, appreciate it always!

Thanks for the compliment WildChild, I had a rough time getting them to work. Glad you liked them!

Christopher thanks much! That is different for me! Glad you got a kick out of it.

Martie, yes it is that time of year. I hope to see some others write some Halloween ones.
Thanks for the reply.

Soleil...guess I should explain why I am going to say Eek. Everytime someone says Boo, I always just answered Eek, just incase you all didn't understand. Thanks!

WhtDove
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23 posted 1999-10-31 01:16 PM


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RobertB
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24 posted 1999-10-31 08:25 PM


LOL....loved the effects too!

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WhtDove
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25 posted 1999-10-31 09:06 PM


Thanks Robert I appreciate it.
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