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Sunshine

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Listening to every heart

0 posted 1999-10-17 10:19 AM

Eleven P.M. Mist

Standing on the street corner
bathed in artificial sunlight
from the all-night street lamp;

smelling the gutter smell of old leaves
and two dead rats;

listening to the hungry howl of an
alley-Tom (remembering my own Tom once
called Mr.), and even the alley-Mr.,
though hunger stricken,
passes by the rancid rats.

Mist comes in, cooling my face
after the warm April afternoon;

but now a chill sets in, in the eleven p.m. mist,
the cold and chilling eleven p.m. mist.

Wish to go home, do I.

But then beggars would ride horses
with silk manes.

Eleven p.m. mist blankets my body,
my body,
not thin,
not fat,
not in-between;

and if I sleep tonight, only my spirit
will stay to be cooled by
the eleven p.m. mist.

Circa April, 1970
©KRJ
17 October 1999

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Sunshine
Look, then, into thine heart, and write ~~~ Henry Wadsworth Longfellow

Pepper
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since 1999-08-19

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1 posted 1999-10-17 10:34 AM

Wonderful imagery Sunshine! I could smell the old leaves and dead rats. Amazing writing, my friend.Loved this one, I do!

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May your days be filled with lots of sunshine and your nights lit up by golden moonbeams

caroline
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2 posted 1999-10-17 12:10 PM

Wow! You take me there with you, Sunshine!
Fantastic imagery here.

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"Tread softly, for I have spread my dreams under your feet"~~William Butler Yeats

Martie

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California

3 posted 1999-10-17 12:31 PM

The imagery in this was wonderful and so real it made me fear for your safety.

Balladeer

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4 posted 1999-10-17 12:47 PM

Sunshine, you get better and better. This is terrific.

U K Hero
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England

5 posted 1999-10-17 01:26 PM

Worthy of praise excellent imagination.

Denise

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6 posted 1999-10-17 01:39 PM

My mind was filled with all the images that you so eloquently portrayed! Well done!

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Denise

Sunshine

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7 posted 1999-10-18 08:58 AM

WOW. I'm humbled by all of the praise.... everyone's! Thank you all for reading.

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