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Systematic Decay Senior Member
since 1999-09-15
Posts 1301That place with padded walls and funny people in white......... |
A mere ant in the nest A small fish in the sea Nobody notices Insignifigant me Just one deer in the woods A squirrel in the park Nobdy cares When I'm left in the dark Just a grain of sand A dim star in the sky I'm always alone And wondering why To a silent wall Everything I've said I wonder if they'd notice If I suddenly dropped dead I'm lost in a glare Brighter than the sun I wish with all my might That at least your having fun ------------------ "Despite all my rage, I am still just a rat in a cage." -Billy Corgan- |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
I have felt like this at times in my life. I have found that the best way to deal with it is to lose myself in thoughts of others! Pretty soon, I'm not even thinking of my problems anymore! Great poem, by the way! ------------------ Denise |
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Alicat Member Elite
since 1999-05-23
Posts 4094Coastal Texas |
The speaker feels insignificant, and by so regaling us with the life the speaker feels so acutely, a potent work is created. Bravo! Also, this sparks a fragmented memory of a song once heard in my disjointed childhood: Nobody likes me, everybody hates me Going to the garden to eat some worms Alicat |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
so sad, but so well put ------------------ This is courage...to bear unflinchingly what heaven sends. ~Eurpides |
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Alwye
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Member Elite
since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
I too have felt like this quite a few times in my life...It's a rough thing to go through...sad, yet wonderfully done. ------------------ *Krista Knutson* I walk with the multitude, yet alone am I in their midst. -- Daniel L. Miller |
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Star Fairy 2 Member
since 1999-09-06
Posts 260cerritos, california, usa |
oooh this hits a sore mark ... insignifigance... my worst fear so far... i hope to live thru this one.. ------------------ Don't Fall.. Rise in Love -------823------- |
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Systematic Decay Senior Member
since 1999-09-15
Posts 1301That place with padded walls and funny people in white......... |
This is my problem, because I have so much to say, but no one listens. I have views that could cause a lot of controversy, and alot of animosity towards me, or a lot of agreement with me, depending on who I'm talking to, but nobody ever cares what I ahve to say, with the exception of the wonderful poets here at passsions. BTW: Anyone interested in improving teen #2, please visit it and reply to my post in there. More of a rant really, but hopefully people will listen.  ------------------ "Despite all my rage, I am still just a rat in a cage." -Billy Corgan- |
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DreamEvil Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 2396 |
Sys, we both know that isn't entirely true as I listen with interest to all you have to say and do not find your views controversial but refreshing rather. Regardless, we are here to listen to you my friend. ------------------ Now and forever, my heart hears ~one voice~. DreamEvil© |
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JennyLee Senior Member
since 1999-09-01
Posts 1461Northwestern, NJ. |
Dear SYS, I care for every single word you write and your views. Keep up the honesty!! Jenny |
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suicidal dreams Member
since 1999-09-28
Posts 343Toledo Ohio USA |
I listen to every word you say and watch everything you do, and let me tell you somethin more people listen to you than you let yourself believe ------------------ life is short kill quick |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Sys, this is very sad, but well put, well done  ------------------ What comes from the heart goes to the heart. Samuel Coleridge |
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