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Open Poetry #3

unspoken

zipknee
Junior Member

since 1999-07-28

Posts 35
Oak Park, IL

0 posted 1999-09-30 08:54 AM

thoughts silently dying
suffocating and suffering
caught in a web
of self-consciousness

ideas drifting away
wailing and crying
battered under a fist
of selfish anxiety

emotions quietly drowning
screaming and flailing
sunk beneath the weight
of self pity and fear

words sullenly still
sulking and brooding
witheld by the lips
of my own free will

suthern

Member Seraphic

since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

1 posted 1999-10-01 12:25 PM

When I'm sulking and brooding, my words are better left unspoken! *S* Well done!

Sally S.
Senior Member

since 1999-06-07

Posts 847
Ohio

2 posted 1999-10-01 01:03 PM

Quite true. Sometimes things are better left unsaid. (Is that a quote or something....hmmmm)

hoot_owl_rn
Member Patricius

since 1999-07-05

Posts 10750
Glen Hope, PA USA

3 posted 1999-10-01 06:16 PM

"witheld by the lips
of my own free will"
Whew...what a line, now why couldn't I have thought of that

Nicely done

hoot_owl_rn
Member Patricius

since 1999-07-05

Posts 10750
Glen Hope, PA USA

4 posted 1999-10-01 06:16 PM

"witheld by the lips
of my own free will"
Whew...what a line, now why couldn't I have thought of that

Nicely done

Denise

Moderator

Member Seraphic

since 1999-08-22

Posts 22648

5 posted 1999-10-04 09:47 PM

I liked this one!

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Denise

Poet deVine

Administrator

Member Seraphic

since 1999-05-26

Posts 22612
Hurricane Alley

6 posted 1999-10-05 12:30 PM

Very good poem! The phrases you used here are unusual but certainly get your message across!

zipknee
Junior Member

since 1999-07-28

Posts 35
Oak Park, IL

7 posted 1999-10-05 09:20 AM

thank you very much everybody.

Seymour Tabin
Member Empyrean

since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

8 posted 1999-10-05 09:42 AM

Zip,
well done enjoyed the read, agree with Hoot about the last two lines.

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