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Crimson Memory
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Crimson Memory |
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Lucie Senior Member
since 1999-06-20
Posts 1077Houston 
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A gentle tug of your memory I see your eyes that stare at me. You try to pinpoint where we met, but you have not remembered yet. It was a time not too long past the memory comes, but fades too fast. And so you shrug and shake my hand my expression you don’t understand. For my memory of you did not fade I remember well the games you played. With the emotions of a younger me embedded in my memory. I was young and so naive so quick to trust and to believe. That you the worldly man you are would hold my hand and take me far. But I was just another notch, upon your sheets a crimson blotch. It’s the only thing I left behind. No compassion in your eyes I find. The elfin blonde who holds your arm does not realize the potential harm. That you will have upon her heart another notch, then you will part. A knowing smile lights my eyes for I have just now realized. That you are not a man at all just a little boy, extremely small. For real men it is understood they need not collect maidenhood. A real man would not take pleasure in stealing a young girls only treasure. ------------------ Never forget what is worth remembering or remember what is best forgotten. |
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caroline Senior Member
since 1999-08-16
Posts 1218http://members.xoom.com/belladona123/index.htm |
Lucie I'll say it again....you ROCK, girlfriend! No one can tell 'em like you do!  ------------------ The only man worth your tears will never make you cry... |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Lucie, this is SO Powerful, and unfortuanately so true in the world today. My heart goes out to you reading this. So sad and poignant as well. Great work. ------------------ Michael Anderson I could not love except where Death Was mingling his with Beauty's breath - Or Hymen, Time, and Destiny Were stalking between her and me. EAP |
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Alwye
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Member Elite
since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
Phenomenal....this is extremely powerful, and way too true. I'm breathless.. ------------------ *Krista Knutson* Wise is he who faces the frailty of man with the strength of an understanding heart. -- Daniel L. Miller |
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Pufalove Member
since 1999-08-18
Posts 119Houston, Tx. USA |
What happens when we run out of comments? This is a really power-packed one! Isn't it great that there are "good guys" out there. |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
EXCELLENT!!!! BRAVO!! Lucie, this is well written and speaks alot of todays society. I'm glad you have the strenght and the courage to write like this, you can make an impact on the world with your words. You go girl!! ------------------ Man can not discover new oceans unless he has the courage to lose sight of the shore. |
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Pepper Member Elite
since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079Southern Florida |
I echo all the above........extremely well written Lucie............. ------------------ May your days be filled with lots of sunshine and your nights lit up by golden moonbeams |
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Lucie Senior Member
since 1999-06-20
Posts 1077Houston |
I thank you all so much for your comments and replies. You honor me with your praises, stoooop it..your makin me cry! |
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Beki Senior Member
since 1999-09-15
Posts 1569Newport Beach, CA, USA |
Well said Lucie...bravo! ------------------ "We read and write poetry because we are members of the human race. And the human race is filled with passion.....the powerful play goes on and you may contribute a verse. What will your verse be?" --John Keating, Dead Poets Society |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Excellent! Every mother should give this to every daugther! ------------------ Denise |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
This needs another go round! ------------------ Denise |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Lucie, Thou shall not steal, that's one of the comandments. Good job. |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Do you know how incredibly good this is!!! You put this man in his place! Small man! And I don't mean in height! Excellent poem, Lucie. |
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Lucie Senior Member
since 1999-06-20
Posts 1077Houston |
Thank you all for your replies.. Dsnyder for the second go around.. and deVine... glad you like it! ------------------ Not all poems I write are about me personally, yet they do come from MY soul. |
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