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Ambivalence (Villanelle for Devine Challenge)
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Ambivalence (Villanelle for Devine Challenge) |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California 
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Ambivalence Alone in darkness, donning scorn, Shadowed beneath the rage of hate, Curse I the day sweet Love was born. Watch I as eyes of Love adorn. While shine in mine doth abdicate Alone in darkness, donning scorn. As Jealousy holds me, forlorn, In pains ne'er to alleviate, Curse I the day sweet Love was born. Emotion ravaged, I lie shorn In barren waste, insatiate, Alone in darkness, donning scorn. Beset in death of Hope, in mourn For none lest woe disseminate, Curse I the day sweet Love was born. Every emotion in me torn, Affliction due the hand of Fate. Alone in Darkness, donning scorn, Curse I the day sweet Love was born. Michael |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
And you said I was kissing up to the teacher! LOL...seriously though...great job on this one Michael! I really liked how it turned out! (and also glad to see the darkness of your soul still regardless of that terrible bite you've got!) |
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DreamEvil Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 2396 |
Definitely Darkly and well done DarkLord.  No lost or dulled edge here, I think. ------------------ Nothing is worse than sorrow, except perhaps disdain. I'll be myself tomorrow, tonight I'll feel the pain. DreamEvil© |
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Watcher666 Senior Member
since 1999-10-13
Posts 1606 |
Fabulous poem Sir,very Dark indeed! ------------------ Illusion...what we see and what we do...it's all up to you. |
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JennyLee Senior Member
since 1999-09-01
Posts 1461Northwestern, NJ. |
Awesome as always!! C well met! Jenny |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Excellent in every detail. |
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poetFemmeFatale Member Elite
since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646Arkansas |
Terrible bite, Christopher? Ha It's more than that ! His mind, body, and soul belong to me.....not to mention one other little tiny part I mentioned in Adult ! Need I remind you ? LOL Very nicely done, because I know how much pain and suffering you went throught to write this darn thing! I give you an "A" as your teacher......he he he Oh, I guess that's not what we're studying here, huh? Sorry.....my mind is in the gutter no matter what day it is.....(sigh) Just ask anyone that knows me !! ------------------ I beckon you to come...I lure you with my tongue... - poet FemmeFatale |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Michael as I've said before, this is a fine piece and knowing the level of difficulty one encounters when writing a villanelle makes me appreciate it even more. |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
What can I say? The master of the dark side is back! Well done Michael! |
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Nicole Senior Member
since 1999-06-23
Posts 1835Florida |
Very dark, and very excellent. |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Nice fan club, Michael - Ya dun gud - in spite of the teacher... |
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Iloveit Senior Member
since 1999-09-02
Posts 1121NM |
really like this, these villanelles are great to read, and when you go back and look to see how they are created makes them even more majestic creations [This message has been edited by Iloveit (edited 10-14-1999).] |
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