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Master
Senior Member

since 1999-08-18

Posts 1867
Boston, MA

0 posted 1999-10-11 03:41 AM

The morning stared into his face
So weak and jaded
The candle faded into haze
The candle faded

Upon his hands, dark stains of ink
Transformed in color
And blooming early, far from spring
The nature hollered

Outside the window, in embrace
The winds debated
The candle faded into haze
The candle faded

Behind the desk, in common stance
So full of wonder
His head lied rested on his hands
His soul in slumber

His writings in the hearth were
Neither burned nor ashen
The molten wax froze on the floor
From last night’s passion

Where tangled in a single gaze
Two fates were braided
The candle faded into haze
The candle faded

The silence crept into the room
Quick and eternal
Dim shades and shadows of his doom
Fell on his journal

The sun was rising in its place
As if inflated
The candle faded into haze
The candle faded

In memory of B. Pasternak

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I fell in love and kept on falling

[This message has been edited by Master (edited 10-12-1999).]

Dragoness
Senior Member

since 1999-08-07

Posts 513

1 posted 1999-10-11 03:48 AM

Like looking into one soul.Beautiful.

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Set you heart free and your mind will follow.

Master
Senior Member

since 1999-08-18

Posts 1867
Boston, MA

2 posted 1999-10-11 01:39 PM

Thanks Dragoness, I'm glad you liked it!

hoot_owl_rn
Member Patricius

since 1999-07-05

Posts 10750
Glen Hope, PA USA

3 posted 1999-10-11 02:31 PM

Master...well done, what a wonderful tribute
there are a few lines that don't flow as well as the rest, but other wise what a wonderful piece of work

Master
Senior Member

since 1999-08-18

Posts 1867
Boston, MA

4 posted 1999-10-11 08:38 PM

Thanks Hoot, tell me which lines and I'll work on them.

U K Hero
Member

since 1999-08-08

Posts 266
England

5 posted 1999-10-12 07:12 AM

Sorry Master I had to read this three times before I recognised it for what it is, brilliant, Well done.

hoot_owl_rn
Member Patricius

since 1999-07-05

Posts 10750
Glen Hope, PA USA

6 posted 1999-10-12 09:39 AM

Master...after reading this wonderful piece of work about a dozen times now, I take back my above comment...don't change a thing, it's wonderful!!

Master
Senior Member

since 1999-08-18

Posts 1867
Boston, MA

7 posted 1999-10-12 01:13 PM

Thanks UK Hero!

Hoot, thanks for your comments, but if there's something I should change let me know, I can appreciatte any critique, especially from a great poet like you! Thanks.

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
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8 posted 2004-05-04 03:51 AM

beautiful tribute

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