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Start from where you are
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla 
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Start from where you are The start and port are in your heart. The voyage into fantasy, The cargo is the player's part The voyage is to ecstasy. The ship carries a wanting soul. With empty holes below its sail. Its shape is like some beggars bowl Sailing towards some far travail. A phantom's ship, a phantom's sea, Loads of wishes and aspire. A phantom's cargo bonhomie, A fantasy of desire. Some journeys sail a stormy sea And some a doldrums never start. The captain's soul the appointee And home and port are in your heart. So point your ship upon a star. And dream your dream however far. |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Well spoken, Sy. A good message in those last lines. |
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Marilyn Member Elite
since 1999-09-26
Posts 2621Ontario, Canada |
I liked the beginning and the end but you lost me somewhere in the middle. I grasp the concept you are protraying. The flow or the feeling wasn't as strong. Just my opinion. I am NO expert. By the way....I was looking in CA and you were refered to a milady. Is the handle purposely deceiving? |
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Pepper Member Elite
since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079Southern Florida |
Sy...wonderful message here....loved the way you weaved these thoughts....excellent as always... ------------------ May your days be filled with lots of sunshine and your nights lit up by golden moonbeams |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Balladeer, Always glad for a comment from you. Marilyn, Thank you for the read and comments, but I don't understand your CA reference and the milady remark? Pepper, You are a sweet and faithful reader, thank you. |
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johnt300 Member
since 1999-09-12
Posts 214san diego, ca. |
Nice one. I love the sea stuff. Tyson |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Another good'n!!  ------------------ Denise |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
very, very nice, mr. sy. A fine piece of writing.  dp |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Sy, this touches me, deeply. Thank you, Sir. |
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JennyLee Senior Member
since 1999-09-01
Posts 1461Northwestern, NJ. |
" And dream your dream however far. " You've said all within these beautiful lines... Jenny |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
Hey SY. Enjoyed the read much! |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Enjoyed very much, Seymour... especially the last two lines! |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Beautiful |
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U K Hero Member
since 1999-08-08
Posts 266England |
Well done Seymour Tabin. I like. |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
I too, enjoyed it very much.. ------------------ What lies behind us and what lies before us are tiny, compared to what lies within us. ~Isis~ (Daughter of Mystery) |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Seymour, This is truly a lovely poem, enjoyed it muchly, loved it from the beginning to the end. ------------------ What comes from the heart goes to the heart. Samuel Coleridge |
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Pufalove Member
since 1999-08-18
Posts 119Houston, Tx. USA |
Oh, you really are a romantic, and didn't want anyone to know! Right? Very nice. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
To all the above I did not answer, my profound thanks for your interest and comments. |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Great philosophy, Sy..... Waft every crest upon your destined sea Embrace the Wave of Serendipity.... |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Nan, You brighten my day whenever I see your name. Thank you. |
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