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Mike
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since 1999-06-19

Posts 2462

0 posted 1999-09-30 04:30 PM

Memories flow as ocean's tide,
As I recall the day love died,
Looking through a mist of tears,
Reflecting on too few the years.

I feel the pain of loneliness,
And fear the lance of neverness,
To nevermore touch on the skies,
As I gaze into your eyes.

To never touch your silken hair,
Nor tender kiss, our love to share,
Two lives as one, was meant to be,
Now one is gone, pain's misery.

No spoken word shall heal the pain,
For what is gone, shall not regain,
For I have lost what was to be,
All that remains, love's memory.

[This message has been edited by Mike (edited 09-30-1999).]

LngJhnAg
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since 1999-07-23

Posts 3508
Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion

1 posted 1999-09-30 04:41 PM

Mike

Every love is different - time for a refill, my man. Nice cadence on the lines - I was at the end of the poem before I realized it.

Marilyn
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since 1999-09-26

Posts 2621
Ontario, Canada

2 posted 1999-09-30 05:41 PM

Beautiful work. Touched my heart. I felt the pain on every word. Like Sailor I was at the end of the poem before I knew it.

Poet deVine

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Member Seraphic

since 1999-05-26

Posts 22612
Hurricane Alley

3 posted 1999-09-30 08:13 PM

You get better each time you post!!!! I love your work, as you know! This is incredible - a perfect poem!

Denise

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Member Seraphic

since 1999-08-22

Posts 22648

4 posted 1999-09-30 08:16 PM

Heartbreaking. And beautiful.

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Denise

Isis
Member Ascendant

since 1999-09-06

Posts 6296
Sunny Queensland

5 posted 1999-10-01 01:29 AM

So sad, I felt all your pain. Well done!!

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What lies behind us and what lies before us are tiny, compared to what lies within us.
~Isis~

Mike
Member Elite

since 1999-06-19

Posts 2462

6 posted 1999-10-01 08:30 AM

Thank you all for your comments about the poem.

Sally S.
Senior Member

since 1999-06-07

Posts 847
Ohio

7 posted 1999-10-01 08:59 AM

What a heartbreaking piece... I could feel the pain.

hoot_owl_rn
Member Patricius

since 1999-07-05

Posts 10750
Glen Hope, PA USA

8 posted 1999-10-01 11:15 PM

Mike, although this poem is quite sad, every line is perfect in it's rhythm and rhyme....you've done very well on this one, of course, I come to expect nothing less from you

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It is better to be silent and be considered a fool, than to speak and remove all doubt.

Nan

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since 1999-05-20

Posts 21191
Cape Cod Massachusetts USA

9 posted 1999-10-03 11:11 AM

Simply exquisite, Mike - and as we move to each successive chapter in our lives, may we hold those past safely and securely within our hearts...

Seymour Tabin
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since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

10 posted 1999-10-03 02:49 PM

Mike,
Whatever could be said, was said, so I'll only say, Well done.

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