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Denise

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0 posted 1999-10-08 11:16 PM

I sail serene
On sea of dreams
And drift along
calm tranquil streams;

I soar cloud fluffs
In azure sky
Above peak's crest
Where eagles fly;

In Paradise
I spend much time
There musing long
And penning rhyme;

'Tis truly this
Makes my heart throb;
I'm careful though
-I need my job!!

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Denise

caroline
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1 posted 1999-10-08 11:24 PM

~*LOL*~ Denise!! You and hoot are gonna get caught at work with ink on your hands!
Just do like I do...hehehe...tell them you're taking notes!

This poem likes me, D!

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"Tread softly, for I have spread my dreams under your feet"~~William Butler Yeats

hoot_owl_rn
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2 posted 1999-10-08 11:29 PM

Beautiful one Denise....I love the meter and rhyme in it also the subject matter is a bit close to my heart

caroline....I only write on break, unless you count writing in my mind, then I am always guilty of that

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Man can not discover new oceans unless he has the courage to lose sight of the shore.

Denise

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3 posted 1999-10-09 12:41 PM

Thanks, Caroline and Hoot! (I don't really get a break or lunch at work, so I make my own 'breaks'!)

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Denise

Poet deVine

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4 posted 1999-10-09 07:13 AM

I loved this one...love the twist at the end.. but it's a lovely, lovely poem!

Seymour Tabin
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5 posted 1999-10-09 08:48 AM

Denice,
Well done a touch of insight into your life.

Mike
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6 posted 1999-10-09 10:16 AM

I float amid the clouds on high,
Carried by your odes sublime,
Beauteous thoughts expressed so well,
Now back to work, quit wasting time.

You do have a special talent Denise.

RobertB
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7 posted 1999-10-09 11:44 AM

wow Denise...you like to twist the endings too?? Very nice poem.....I liked it much!!!

RB

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if you can dream; you can fly...if you are flying; you are dreaming.

Denise

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8 posted 1999-10-09 12:51 PM

Thank you PdV, Seymour, Mike and Robert for reading and commenting. ....ahhhhhh Mike, do I have to *whining*! Robert, yes I love twisting endings! (closest I seem to be able to come to wit!)
Thanks again all!!!

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Denise

Alwye

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9 posted 1999-10-09 11:45 PM

LOL, love the twist to the end of a beautiful work!

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*Krista Knutson*

Wise is he who faces the frailty of man with the strength of an understanding heart. -- Daniel L. Miller

Denise

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10 posted 1999-10-10 12:14 PM

Thanks, Krista, glad you liked it! It was fun to do!

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Genea
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11 posted 1999-10-13 09:46 AM

this flowed well and i love the 'surprise' ending.

Ohme
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12 posted 1999-10-13 09:53 AM

Now that I am retired I no longer have to keep a 'cover' sheet handy to cover the evidence. Loved the ending as well.

Ohme

WhtDove
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13 posted 1999-10-13 10:02 AM

Denise this was a great poem! You had me calm and serene at the beginning. Great job, great ending!

Munda
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14 posted 1999-10-14 07:35 PM

Denise, I love it, from the first word until the last.

Denise

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15 posted 1999-10-14 07:45 PM

Genea, Ohme,WhtDove and Munda, I'm glad you liked this! I had fun writing it! Thank you for your lovely comments!

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Denise

Nan

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16 posted 1999-10-17 02:56 PM

Hehe - Don't they understand that this is more important?

Denise

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17 posted 1999-10-17 03:50 PM

I know, what's WRONG with these people!

Thanks for reading and commenting, Nan, it's always appreciated!

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Denise

Pepper
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18 posted 1999-10-17 04:03 PM

Delightful piece Denise!

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May your days be filled with lots of sunshine and your nights lit up by golden moonbeams

Denise

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19 posted 1999-10-17 04:16 PM

Thank you much, Pepper, I'm glad you liked it!

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Denise

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20 posted 1999-10-17 04:21 PM

Denise, this poem was beautiful. I loved the twist ending too...i think everyone so far has.

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"Despite all my rage, I am still just a rat in a cage."
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jac
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21 posted 1999-10-17 04:24 PM

D, great job. I also post my poetry on this site! You are very talented!

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Denise

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22 posted 1999-10-17 04:25 PM

Thanks, SD, I'm glad you liked it too!
(sorry, all the smiley faces are gone...hehehehehe)!

...ooops...Why thank you jac! I'm glad you liked it too! (you beat me to the post!)
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Denise

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Martie

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23 posted 1999-10-17 09:29 PM

There are so many that can relate to this here. I wonder why? Great poem.

Denise

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24 posted 1999-10-17 09:39 PM

Thanks for reading and commenting, Martie!
Yeah, I guess we're all cut from the same cloth!!! I'd rather write poetry than work anyday. Say I wonder if could find a job writing poetry!?

Then I wouldn't even care that I worked long hours for little pay, no benefits (yet), no paid holidays, having to work holidays! Oh my, I do think I am going to look for another job soon! There are too many holidays coming up!

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Denise

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