THIS is an attempt at Hiaku...I think.

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Open Poetry #3

THIS is an attempt at Hiaku...I think.

Marilyn
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since 1999-09-26

Posts 2621
Ontario, Canada

0 posted 1999-09-30 08:42 PM

I feel your closeness
Your touch on my soft skin
Your breath on my neck

Our hearts become one
Souls tied fast by strands of time
Nothing can tear down

I feel your soft kiss
Long for you to stay forever
I know you must go away

In my heart you'll stay
Ever charished my love
I am truely blest

For to have known love
But to have to had to let go
To have felt complete

Then to have never
Felt your kiss on my sweet lips
I will always love

Denise

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Member Seraphic

since 1999-08-22

Posts 22648

1 posted 1999-09-30 08:44 PM

I don't know very much about the different forms of poetry, but I know that I like this!

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Denise

Marilyn
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since 1999-09-26

Posts 2621
Ontario, Canada

2 posted 1999-09-30 08:49 PM

I don't know much about the different forms either...but I am learning!

Beki
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since 1999-09-15

Posts 1569
Newport Beach, CA, USA

3 posted 1999-10-01 03:49 AM

no, not haiku, but a beautifully written poem just the same :-)

Marilyn
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since 1999-09-26

Posts 2621
Ontario, Canada

4 posted 1999-10-01 10:30 AM

Beki....I have been informed that you are the one to ask about haiku. Please tell me where to find how to write haiku. This is the form I found when I looked for it. Do you know what this form is? I am trying to learn but seem to be getting no where fast. I am going to be using the tutorials when they come on line.

hoot_owl_rn
Member Patricius

since 1999-07-05

Posts 10750
Glen Hope, PA USA

5 posted 1999-10-01 05:05 PM

Beautiful

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Lost Dreamer
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since 1999-06-20

Posts 2464
Somewhere near the Rainbow

6 posted 1999-11-06 07:45 PM

Marilyn
Member Elite

since 1999-09-26

Posts 2621
Ontario, Canada

7 posted 1999-11-06 09:46 PM

Ok..I am confused?????? All my old stuff is being dragged to the surface...I'm flattered but don't understand?

Watcher666
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since 1999-10-13

Posts 1606

8 posted 1999-11-06 11:07 PM

Lovely!

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