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Marilyn
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since 1999-09-26
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0 posted 1999-09-30 08:42 PM


I feel your closeness
Your touch on my soft skin
Your breath on my neck

Our hearts become one
Souls tied fast by strands of time
Nothing can tear down

I feel your soft kiss
Long for you to stay forever
I know you must go away

In my heart you'll stay
Ever charished my love
I am truely blest

For to have known love
But to have to had to let go
To have felt complete

Then to have never
Felt your kiss on my sweet lips
I will always love


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Denise
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1 posted 1999-09-30 08:44 PM


I don't know very much about the different forms of poetry, but I know that I like this!

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Denise

Marilyn
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2 posted 1999-09-30 08:49 PM


I don't know much about the different forms either...but I am learning!
Beki
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3 posted 1999-10-01 03:49 AM


no, not haiku, but a beautifully written poem just the same :-)
Marilyn
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4 posted 1999-10-01 10:30 AM


Beki....I have been informed that you are the one to ask about haiku. Please tell me where to find how to write haiku. This is the form I found when I looked for it. Do you know what this form is? I am trying to learn but seem to be getting no where fast. I am going to be using the tutorials when they come on line.
hoot_owl_rn
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5 posted 1999-10-01 05:05 PM


Beautiful

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It is better to be silent and be considered a fool, than to speak and remove all doubt.

Lost Dreamer
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Somewhere near the Rainbow
6 posted 1999-11-06 07:45 PM



Marilyn
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since 1999-09-26
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7 posted 1999-11-06 09:46 PM


Ok..I am confused?????? All my old stuff is being dragged to the surface...I'm flattered but don't understand?
Watcher666
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8 posted 1999-11-06 11:07 PM


Lovely!

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Illusion...what we see and what we do...it's all up to you.

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