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Elysium Moon
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since 1999-07-22
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0 posted 1999-08-30 12:24 PM



Silvery wings spreading wide
she took her lover deep inside
held him in her womanly vise
till he surrendered to her ice
Nymph of lambent ice so pure
took a victim as her cure
no mortal will she allow to be
succor of her immortality
cast aside he lay replete
spells were given, now complete
doomed to roam for eternity
remembering her femininity

© Copyright 1999 Elysium Moon - All Rights Reserved
Miss Behavin'
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since 1999-06-16
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1 posted 1999-09-01 12:31 PM


Whoa - Such FanciFree..... Very lovely, E.Moon.....
caroline
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2 posted 1999-09-06 01:55 AM


VERY nice! Enjoyed the read.

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The only man worth your tears will never make you cry...

Saxoness
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3 posted 1999-09-06 08:38 PM


kewl, very good.



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"Glory remains unaware of my neglected dwelling where alone
I sing my tearful song which has charms only for me."

-Charles Brugnot



JennyLee
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since 1999-09-01
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Northwestern, NJ.
4 posted 1999-09-08 03:07 PM


Bravo!! This captured me totally !!
MORE.....

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Helewes

Beki
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since 1999-09-15
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Newport Beach, CA, USA
5 posted 1999-09-16 09:22 PM


This is a wonderful series you are working on...it has me totally hooked..can't wait for more...
"Silvery wings spreading wide
she took her lover deep inside
held him in her womanly vise
till he surrendered to her ice"
rhyme and meter perfect, imagery fresh and original..good stuff! :-)


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"We read and write poetry because we are members of the human race. And the human race is filled with passion.....the powerful play goes on and you may contribute a verse. What will your verse be?"
--John Keating, Dead Poets Society

loyd168282
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since 1999-09-10
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lou,ky jefferson
6 posted 1999-09-17 01:57 AM


such a nice job!! it is so deep. thank you for posting that.


Loyd,

Elysium Moon
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since 1999-07-22
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7 posted 1999-10-02 06:35 PM


I decided to write a beginning...See Birth of the Immortal...
bsquirrel
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8 posted 2002-05-23 02:31 PM


Hey, ah remember this!

She said burn ... together.
-TON

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