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Echo Rhayne
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since 1999-09-17
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Canyon Country, CA

0 posted 1999-10-03 03:39 AM


If I could...
I would cry all your tears;
feel your hurt, fight your fears:
...because I adore you!
If I could...
I would rearrange the universe;
and put all your heart desires first:
....because I need you!
If I could...
I would make happiness your personal slave;
and bring joy into your saddest days:
...because I miss you!
If I could...
I would write your name with the stars above;
so that the world could see, it's you I love:
...because I want you!
If I could...
There wouldn't be nothing I wouldn't do;
to simply show I love you:
...because I do!


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~*~ I write to know I am alive ~*~

© Copyright 1999 Echo Rhayne - All Rights Reserved
Pufalove
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since 1999-08-18
Posts 119
Houston, Tx. USA
1 posted 1999-10-03 06:08 AM


Pretty powerful, this love thing.......so is your poem!
U K Hero
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since 1999-08-08
Posts 266
England
2 posted 1999-10-03 07:41 AM


Devotion is what I see here (wish I could be your man), and devotion seems to be missing in today’s world well penned Echo.
hoot_owl_rn
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since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750
Glen Hope, PA USA
3 posted 1999-10-03 09:22 AM


Absolutely beautiful Echo.....you've read my thoughts with this piece. Thanks for sharing
Pepper
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since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079
Southern Florida
4 posted 1999-10-03 11:19 AM


a beautiful read Echo

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May your days be filled with lots of sunshine and your nights lit up by golden moonbeams

Poet deVine
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Hurricane Alley
5 posted 1999-10-03 11:49 AM


Wonderful lines here, Echo! If everyone could only be so loving, the world would be perfect!

Echo Rhayne
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since 1999-09-17
Posts 1495
Canyon Country, CA
6 posted 1999-10-03 03:21 PM


Thank you all for your so kind comments on this poem. If only the person it was written for cared, ya know? Oh well *sigh* Someone does, and that is enough, for now


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~*~ I write to know I am alive ~*~

Systematic Decay
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since 1999-09-15
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That place with padded walls and funny people in white.........
7 posted 1999-10-03 03:34 PM


Great poem.....I dont know what else to say.

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"Despite all my rage, I am still just a rat in a cage."
-Billy Corgan-

Systematic Decay
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since 1999-09-15
Posts 1301
That place with padded walls and funny people in white.........
8 posted 1999-10-03 03:34 PM


Great poem.....I dont know what else to say.

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"Despite all my rage, I am still just a rat in a cage."
-Billy Corgan-

Denise
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since 1999-08-22
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9 posted 1999-10-03 03:40 PM


Very beautiful and well constructed. It's great to have you back!!

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Denise

Watcher666
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since 1999-10-13
Posts 1606

10 posted 1999-10-29 01:12 AM


Beautiful verse.Well done!

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Illusion...what we see and what we do...it's all up to you.

Echo Rhayne
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since 1999-09-17
Posts 1495
Canyon Country, CA
11 posted 1999-10-29 01:17 AM


Talk about diggin up old poems LoL...Where did you find this one Watcher? Thanks for reading and replying!


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~*~ Time erases and rewrites all the lines. What remains is the poetry! ~*~


Isis
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since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296
Sunny Queensland
12 posted 1999-10-29 02:04 AM


Beauitful verse and thoughts, if only more people saw the light.

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How long after you are gone will ripples remain as evidence that you were cast into the pool?
~Isis~
(Daughter of Mystery)



devina
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since 1999-10-28
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Cali
13 posted 1999-10-29 02:36 AM


IF ONLY MORE COULD LOVE AS HARD AS YOU...I REALLY ENJOYED THIS ONE!
Michael
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since 1999-08-13
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California
14 posted 1999-10-29 02:58 AM


Very sweet, Echo. Beautiful poem.

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Michael Anderson

Is all that we see or seem
but a dream within a dream?



Echo Rhayne
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since 1999-09-17
Posts 1495
Canyon Country, CA
15 posted 1999-10-29 04:04 AM


Isis...Thank you kindly. Yes you are right, if only more people saw the light...*sigh*

Devina...Thank you, glad you enjoyed it!

Michael... Thank you kindly!



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~*~ Time erases and rewrites all the lines. What remains is the poetry! ~*~


WhtDove
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since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245
Illinois
16 posted 1999-10-29 08:08 AM


This was from the heart! Couldn't have said it better myself! Terrific Echo!
hoot_owl_rn
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since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750
Glen Hope, PA USA
17 posted 1999-10-29 12:10 PM


sweet
Echo Rhayne
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since 1999-09-17
Posts 1495
Canyon Country, CA
18 posted 1999-10-29 01:10 PM


Rebecca...Thank you kindly!

Ruth...Thanks again


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~*~ Time erases and rewrites all the lines. What remains is the poetry! ~*~


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