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Echo Rhayne Senior Member
since 1999-09-17
Posts 1495Canyon Country, CA 
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If I could... I would cry all your tears; feel your hurt, fight your fears: ...because I adore you! If I could... I would rearrange the universe; and put all your heart desires first: ....because I need you! If I could... I would make happiness your personal slave; and bring joy into your saddest days: ...because I miss you! If I could... I would write your name with the stars above; so that the world could see, it's you I love: ...because I want you! If I could... There wouldn't be nothing I wouldn't do; to simply show I love you: ...because I do! ------------------ ~*~ I write to know I am alive ~*~ |
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Pufalove Member
since 1999-08-18
Posts 119Houston, Tx. USA |
Pretty powerful, this love thing.......so is your poem! |
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U K Hero Member
since 1999-08-08
Posts 266England |
Devotion is what I see here (wish I could be your man), and devotion seems to be missing in today’s world well penned Echo. |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Absolutely beautiful Echo.....you've read my thoughts with this piece. Thanks for sharing |
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Pepper Member Elite
since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079Southern Florida |
a beautiful read Echo ------------------ May your days be filled with lots of sunshine and your nights lit up by golden moonbeams |
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Poet deVine
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Wonderful lines here, Echo! If everyone could only be so loving, the world would be perfect!  |
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Echo Rhayne Senior Member
since 1999-09-17
Posts 1495Canyon Country, CA |
Thank you all for your so kind comments on this poem. If only the person it was written for cared, ya know? Oh well *sigh* Someone does, and that is enough, for now  ------------------ ~*~ I write to know I am alive ~*~ |
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Systematic Decay Senior Member
since 1999-09-15
Posts 1301That place with padded walls and funny people in white......... |
Great poem.....I dont know what else to say. ------------------ "Despite all my rage, I am still just a rat in a cage." -Billy Corgan- |
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Systematic Decay Senior Member
since 1999-09-15
Posts 1301That place with padded walls and funny people in white......... |
Great poem.....I dont know what else to say. ------------------ "Despite all my rage, I am still just a rat in a cage." -Billy Corgan- |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Very beautiful and well constructed. It's great to have you back!! ------------------ Denise |
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Watcher666 Senior Member
since 1999-10-13
Posts 1606 |
Beautiful verse.Well done! ------------------ Illusion...what we see and what we do...it's all up to you. |
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Echo Rhayne Senior Member
since 1999-09-17
Posts 1495Canyon Country, CA |
Talk about diggin up old poems LoL...Where did you find this one Watcher? Thanks for reading and replying! ------------------ ~*~ Time erases and rewrites all the lines. What remains is the poetry! ~*~ |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
Beauitful verse and thoughts, if only more people saw the light.  ------------------ How long after you are gone will ripples remain as evidence that you were cast into the pool? ~Isis~ (Daughter of Mystery) |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali |
IF ONLY MORE COULD LOVE AS HARD AS YOU...I REALLY ENJOYED THIS ONE! |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Very sweet, Echo. Beautiful poem. ------------------ Michael Anderson Is all that we see or seem but a dream within a dream? |
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Echo Rhayne Senior Member
since 1999-09-17
Posts 1495Canyon Country, CA |
Isis...Thank you kindly. Yes you are right, if only more people saw the light...*sigh* Devina...Thank you, glad you enjoyed it! Michael... Thank you kindly!------------------ ~*~ Time erases and rewrites all the lines. What remains is the poetry! ~*~ |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
This was from the heart! Couldn't have said it better myself! Terrific Echo! |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
sweet |
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Echo Rhayne Senior Member
since 1999-09-17
Posts 1495Canyon Country, CA |
Rebecca...Thank you kindly! Ruth...Thanks again ------------------ ~*~ Time erases and rewrites all the lines. What remains is the poetry! ~*~ |
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