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Wating for Love |
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Watcher666 Senior Member
since 1999-10-13
Posts 1606 |
Lost and confused Thoughts to the wind Sitting here wondering When does it begin? When is it my time To feel a love so new When do I feel the joy? Of loving someone too Am I forever to be alone? Sitting waiting here Or is love around the corner Could it be that near? Will I miss the scent of flowers? And walking in the rain Seeing sunset beaches Sharing joys and pain Who will hold my hand? When the end is near Telling that they love me And there nothing left to fear Looking at the stars Feeling all alone Waiting for a love That I can call my own. ------------------ Illusion...what we see and what we do...it's all up to you. |
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H. Arlequin Member
since 1999-08-23
Posts 210 |
HA applauds!! |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
Wow Lurking one...this tells me that you're not having a hopeful time here!  Keep looking...I know that the one who gets you is going to be a damn lucky guy! |
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DreamEvil Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 2396 |
Patience sister mine, as you once counseled me to cultivate it, so I advise the same. You know where I am and that I am here for you, always. ------------------ Now and forever, my heart hears ~one voice~. DreamEvil© |
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Ohme Senior Member
since 1999-07-17
Posts 816Texas |
Lovely but sad |
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RSEvans Senior Member
since 1999-10-23
Posts 1147Tulsa, OK, USA |
Isn't it amazing that our lowest regrets and our most happy times come through so much more vividly in our poetry? I remeber well the pain of being alone, and it does indeed make finding someone seem so much sweeter. Never ever give up. ------------------ No matter where you go, somebody's probably already been there and gotten the parking space... |
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JennyLee Senior Member
since 1999-09-01
Posts 1461Northwestern, NJ. |
Love's around the corner just wait and see...there's a love out there just meant for thee  Jenny |
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Scarlet pimpernel New Member
since 1999-10-27
Posts 9Birkenhead,Wirral,England |
Not convinced with this one. Try to write a poem without thinking to much about what you are writing, and think a bit more about what you are writing about. Stay focused. |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
I see this poem as completely focused - The theme never deviates, but rather develops nicely. The rhyme scheme is also intact. The only improvements I would see as relevant would be some minor meter mending.... I like it! |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Excellent Poem Watcher, although the subject is sad |
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Scarlet pimpernel New Member
since 1999-10-27
Posts 9Birkenhead,Wirral,England |
Nan, I didn't mean stay focused as in stay to the theme. It was more along the lines of stay focused to where the feeling is coming from. |
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Watcher666 Senior Member
since 1999-10-13
Posts 1606 |
Thank-You all for reading.Late morning blues I guess. Nan, SP Thank-You I'm always looking to improve my writing any help is gratefully appreciated. ------------------ Illusion...what we see and what we do...it's all up to you. |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
Watcher....Not being the pro like most of the others here, I think your poetry is fine! Well done and well thought out...I'll bet you're a very sweet person.... |
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Verma Member
since 1999-10-25
Posts 80Midlands, England |
Watcher....I thought this piece was lovely, I enjoyed reading it very much. |
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Iloveit Senior Member
since 1999-09-02
Posts 1121NM |
watcher, I like this, it touches me, know just where you come from well done |
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Pepper Member Elite
since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079Southern Florida |
A heartfelt piece that I enjoyed reading. Thanks for sharing Watcher! ------------------ A soul that writes from the heart and shares it, truly gives a gift extrordinaire! |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Wonderful, wonderful, wonderful! ------------------ Denise |
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Munda Member Elite
since 1999-10-08
Posts 3544The Hague, The Netherlands |
Watcher, so sad and yet so beautiful. |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Great poem Watcher, you certainly have been a blessing to passions. Very enjoyable work, ------------------ Michael Anderson Is all that we see or seem but a dream within a dream? |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Great poem... I know how hard it is to wait... you captured the loneliness well! |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali |
LOVE...A RIDDLE AS OLD AS TIME, YET THE SECRET BEHIND STILL REMAINS A MYSTERY. VERY GOOD POEM! |
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moonmoon Member
since 1999-08-13
Posts 277TX , USA |
I cast my kudos too....Well done.. |
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Julie Jordan Scott Member
since 1999-09-19
Posts 146Bakersfield, CA USA |
Beautifully written....hopefully you will not have to ponder on this one for too terribly long! Sometimes I wonder why ache and mourning can birth such beautiful art? ------------------ Julie Jordan Scott is a Freelance Writer and Public Speaker, but her favorite role is that of Mommy! Visit her website at http://www.5passions.com |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Echoes of a universal human feeling... Just when we think we are secure in our love and will never have to feel lonely or heartbroken again, Boom! There we are... In that same situation... Lovely, Poem.... |
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