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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana 
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With apologies to Mr. Sandman. *G* Oh, Mr. Robot, lend me a trick I need to understand just what makes you tick. How do you stand there, so unfeeling When every day sets my senses reeling? Mr. Robot - Oh, where were you When I stood hand in hand and said "I do" To someone that I so trusted? Too darn bad that he was so disgusted. Mr. Robot, I sure could have used Your fortitude when I was abused... Who's that creature there in the corner? Why didn't anyone bother to warn her? Mr. Robot, I just couldn't learn. I kept loving and kept getting burned. In a meeting, facing the snickers Surely there most be some death quicker Than knowing the love of your life Early last week took him a wife... I willed myself to a vacant stare But how I wanted to just not care! Oh Mr. Robot, you do look so kind. Please explain, if you wouldn't mind How I can escape from this hell? Mr. Robot, lend me your shell! |
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LJA'sLorelei54 Junior Member
since 1999-09-24
Posts 18Gaithersburg, MD |
torn between telling you how creative you are and how your heart must have been feeling...so I will tell you both! Any news on a trip yet? anxiously awaiting... |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Wow....this was very creative  |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Lor & Hoot: I hope creative is good? LOL. Thanks for reading. Lor: Would it destroy all your illusions to know that this was born while I was taking a bubble bath, singing that ole 40's tune Mr. Sandman to myself? Self-preservation is powerful... I think my mind devised this poem to quieten the noise! *G* |
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LJA'sLorelei54 Junior Member
since 1999-09-24
Posts 18Gaithersburg, MD |
Creative is good! I too sing to myself and LJA smiles at me and makes me feel self-concious...but I like having a song in my heart! |
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RainbowGirl Member Elite
since 1999-07-31
Posts 3023United Kingdom |
Suthern: So sad but wonderfully done my friend... Big HUSG ------------------ You give but little when you give of your possessions. It is when you give of yourself that you truly give. |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
( "Mr. Sandman" continues.......) Hey, there, Suthern, You're such a mess You're overloaded With nerves and with stress You bet your savings on that foolish slow nag Thinking to win with that Nogoodnik Toerag! Hey, there, Suthern Don't waste your time Find other poets That don't fracture rhyme And move right up to quality Hey there, Suthern, dump Toe. Pick me! |
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Andrew Scott Member Elite
since 1999-06-24
Posts 2558Redlands,CA,USA |
Well done Suthern. I too find the shower is a place where poetic ideas come about. Something to do with water and the flow of ideas? Hmmmm.... Oh well, again, thanks for the read. |
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Iloveit Senior Member
since 1999-09-02
Posts 1121NM |
well after all day, I finally made it ...whew...great job, just loved the imaging, and hey if you get your wish, share ok? hugs |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
Great one, imaginative you are! |
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Watcher666 Senior Member
since 1999-10-13
Posts 1606 |
Liked this much.Well done. ------------------ Illusion...what we see and what we do...it's all up to you. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Rainbow, Andrew, Lovey, WhtDove and Watcher... thank you all very much for your kind words... I appreciate them greatly! *S* And Balladeer... ROFLMAO... You are SO brave when you know darn well you are SO safe! LOL. But thanks for the grins! |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Very well done, Suthern! I enjoyed this! ------------------ Denise |
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JTF Member
since 1999-08-09
Posts 319France |
Auntie, we had been expecting a poem from you for a while ... but it was worth it ... superb ... and I add a SMOOCH to RG's hugs ! [This message has been edited by JTF (edited 11-02-1999).] |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
dsnyder & JTF: Thank you! And Froggie... smooches are always welcomed! *G* |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Suthern, What the hell you don't need a shell Shells are for snails you need a sail. Sails are for ships that sail the sea. And the water is fine just sail with me. Just write yourself a queen in a dream. Make it a good one if you know what I mean. A dream will not keep you overlong, but Warm, until mister right comes along. *L* |
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Pepper Member Elite
since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079Southern Florida |
Very creative suthern..... Sad and so well written! ------------------ A soul that writes from the heart and shares it, truly gives a gift extrordinaire! |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Thank you, Pepper... Lor assures me creative is good, so I'm beaming with the responses! *G* And Seymour... you dear!!! Thank you! |
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Blackdrake Member
since 1999-07-23
Posts 83Depends on the day :) |
It is a sad tale. But well written. ------------------ Thy own Darkness shall conquer the Light |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
Very well done gal....and such nice replies from the others as well...(except for that mean damn bug man...and I've been so kind to him lately...turnin' the other cheek and all that other crap).....LOL |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Thank you, Blackdrake and Toe... and Toe, I'd noticed that, too... That bug man never misses an opportunity to be mean to you... and you're so kind to him... I simply don't understand it! LOL |
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