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Shooting Star
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Shooting Star |
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Thunder Moomba Junior Member
since 1999-10-30
Posts 21Baldwin Park, CA, USA |
You were always there when I needed you, You never left my side. Always there to lean on, And dry the tears I cried. I could always talk to you, And you never seemed to mind. Your voice so honest and gentle, Your words so honest and kind. I thought I'd never meet someone as special as you are. You are my best friend in the whole world, And thats why You are my shooting star. ------------ I don't think this poem went well. Can you E-Mail or respond and tell me what u think of it? Thank You ------------------ Jr. Rodrigo M. Daz_ |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
TM it's fine!!  Better descriptions and imagery will come to you with time and practise. But this is great!! Don't be so quick to condemn yourself ok? ------------------ Cast your eyes on the ocean, Every man goes down to his death bearing in his hands only that which he has given away... ~Isis~ (Daughter of Mystery) |
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Watcher666 Senior Member
since 1999-10-13
Posts 1606 |
Well done!!! ------------------ Illusion...what we see and what we do...it's all up to you. |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Loved it !! ------------------ What comes from the heart goes to the heart. Samuel Coleridge |
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Thunder Moomba Junior Member
since 1999-10-30
Posts 21Baldwin Park, CA, USA |
Thank You Isis, Thank You Watcher, Thank ya Dark  ------------------ Jr. Rodrigo M. Daz_ |
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