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hoot_owl_rn
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0 posted 1999-10-31 09:35 AM


The Night I Met You

The south wind blew mellow
Grass was covered in dew
The pale moon shone brightly
On the night I met you

The mist on the ocean
Was just starting to rise
Breath caught for a moment
When I looked in your eyes

The depths of my own soul
It reflected was there
And just for a moment
Became too much to bear

You mirrored all my fears
All my hurt and my pain
You pulled me in gently
As it started to rain

The downpour refreshing
We could not feel it’s chill
It ended abruptly
And the night became still

I heard your heart beating
It was so near to mine
Two hearts became one heart
Beating rhythms in time

We walked by the ocean
Saw the lights from the ships
You pulled me in closer
As you first kissed my lips

Were the stars that I glimpsed
In the skies or my mind?
Were the feelings I felt
Dreams that I’d hoped to find?

Was it cool when we met
That night in November?
I was lost in your eyes
And I can’t remember



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This is courage...to bear unflinchingly what heaven sends. ~Eurpides

© Copyright 1999 Ruth Kephart - All Rights Reserved
Systematic Decay
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1 posted 1999-10-31 09:39 AM


How beautiful, hoot. I really love this one.

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"Despite all my rage, I am still just a rat in a cage."
-Billy Corgan-

WhtDove
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2 posted 1999-10-31 10:24 AM


Well my dear friend! You certainly rose to the occasion! sigh...beautiful work but I knew it would be. Love it!!!
Ohme
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3 posted 1999-10-31 11:16 AM


Hoot, this is lovely.
Corinne
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4 posted 1999-10-31 12:31 PM


Hoot! I love this! I grew up at the ocean, met my first love there, and I can see myself in this poem. I can also envision you and your love as well.

The imagery is perfect.

Corinne

Balladeer
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5 posted 1999-10-31 12:43 PM


Beautiful poem, Hoot...and the meter is wonderful.
Seymour Tabin
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6 posted 1999-10-31 12:57 PM


Hoot,
I can only emulate Balladeer, beautiful poem
wonderful meter.

Denise
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7 posted 1999-10-31 12:58 PM


This is very beautiful, Hoot! So dreamy!

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Denise


Verma
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8 posted 1999-10-31 01:58 PM


what more can i say other than beautiful...
hoot_owl_rn
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9 posted 1999-10-31 05:39 PM


Thanks everyone for your kind comments

Balladeer, thanks for pointing out the fact the meter didn't quite catch it on the first version...and thanks for your comment about it here

Munda
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10 posted 1999-10-31 05:41 PM


*Sigh*....beautiful Hoot. : )
Isis
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11 posted 1999-10-31 05:46 PM


So beautiful Hoot, another big (sigh)

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Cast your eyes on the ocean,
Every man goes down to his death bearing in his hands only that which he has given away...
~Isis~
(Daughter of Mystery)



Skyfyre
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12 posted 1999-10-31 05:52 PM


Absolutely spellbinding!

--Kess

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You cannot choose the way of your death, but the path you choose will determine its own end.


hoot_owl_rn
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14 posted 1999-10-31 08:14 PM


Munda, Isis and Skyfire...thank you for your comments

marzar...what a wonderful comment, I'm not sure I am deserving of it, but thank you none the less

Severn
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15 posted 1999-11-01 08:01 PM


Lovely...but that's not a surprise!
Watcher666
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16 posted 1999-11-02 03:29 AM


Loved this....so beautiful!

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Illusion...what we see and what we do...it's all up to you.

Dark Angel
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17 posted 1999-11-02 06:41 AM


Hoot, this is truly beautiful, loved it

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What comes from the heart goes to the heart.
Samuel Coleridge



handbagsatfiftypaces
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18 posted 1999-11-02 07:26 AM


yes it's good hoot, it has almost perfect rhyme and meter and all that. it makes me sad
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