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RSEvans Senior Member
since 1999-10-23
Posts 1147Tulsa, OK, USA 
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Walking through the idled throng, Surrounded on all sides By a streaming mass of people Who will not halt their strides. I look to see the eyes of each but none will meet my stare. Twould seem that one could easily Catch my fleeting glare. What hatred do I harbor for These sheep without a flock, Led about by their purse strings Like cattle-branded stock? Should be pity that I feel And yet there's no remorse For I was once just like they Guided on my course. No single thought nor ray of light No original self at all. What keeps them all suspended And protects them from a fall? It must be that God loves them Even though they do not care. It's hard to see Him in their eyes behind that vacant stare. I stop and then I wonder now How could I make them see? How could I wake them from their sleep And make them all like me? And then I realize what God said About their fatal course: Tis not for me to make them choose It must be their own choice. ------------------ Once I was brilliant, now I no longer shine, but the twinkle in my eye speaks of another time. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
RSEvans, Good rhyme, good line, enjoyed the read. |
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Iloveit Senior Member
since 1999-09-02
Posts 1121NM |
great message, nicely done, good to see *you* awake and in the land of poetry  |
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poetFemmeFatale Member Elite
since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646Arkansas |
Robert, all I can say to the powerful message this portrays is WOW ! When I first saw the title I wasn't sure what to expect! hehe I was most pleasantly surprised! Great job here, and it speaks volumes! BRAVO! ------------------ ~~ Lift your head high - spread your "words" and fly - - poetFemmeFatale |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Excellent verse with a strong message. A poem needs no more than that. Well done. |
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Pepper Member Elite
since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079Southern Florida |
Good message. Great poem! ------------------ A soul that writes from the heart and shares it, truly gives a gift extrordinaire! |
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RSEvans Senior Member
since 1999-10-23
Posts 1147Tulsa, OK, USA |
To all...thanks. To PFF: What did you think it was about? You've been hanging out in Adult too much. ------------------ Once I was brilliant, now I no longer shine, but the twinkle in my eye speaks of another time. |
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tori Senior Member
since 1999-06-18
Posts 520Mechanicsville, Maryland, USA |
Great Job here. I really enjoyed the read.. |
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Emmy Member
since 1999-06-29
Posts 194KY |
WOW! Like PFF, I wasn't really sure what to expect here, but I definitly like what I saw! Excellent! |
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Watcher666 Senior Member
since 1999-10-13
Posts 1606 |
Good reading here! Enjoyed this much! ------------------ Illusion...what we see and what we do...it's all up to you. |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
What a poem and what a message...yes, everyone has to live their own life, no matter how much we might disagree |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
I enjoyed this one too, RS. You are quite talented, aren't you?! ------------------ Denise |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Wow, Indeed. Unlike Femme, for some reason I knew exactly (or at least instinctively first thought of) what the title was implying before I even read it...but you did a superb job delivering the message. Great poem, Robert. ------------------ Michael Anderson [This message has been edited by Michael (edited 10-29-1999).] |
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