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Open Poetry #3

The Puddle of Life

RSEvans
Senior Member

since 1999-10-23

Posts 1147
Tulsa, OK, USA

0 posted 1999-10-23 05:54 PM

Reflections of Life
In still water shine
To reach my eyes.
The life is mine.
Ripples flow
From side to side,
And the puddle of life
Forms its own tide.
Through the water
The waves flow
Carrying the images
To and fro.
Back and forth
My life does wash
And before my eyes
I see the cost;
The cost of life,
The pain and loss,
But the rewards
Were worth the cost.
The rewards are harder
To see somehow.
They're under the water
Buried in the bow
Of a sunken ship of memory
Forever protected
On the bottom of
The puddle of life.

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On the wings of day-bright dreams...

Watcher666
Senior Member

since 1999-10-13

Posts 1606

1 posted 1999-10-23 06:03 PM

Nicely done.Liked this much!

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Illusion...what we see and what we do...it's all up to you.

Denise

Moderator

Member Seraphic

since 1999-08-22

Posts 22648

2 posted 1999-10-23 06:36 PM

Nice!

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Denise

Systematic Decay
Senior Member

since 1999-09-15

Posts 1301
That place with padded walls and funny people in white.........

3 posted 1999-10-24 02:55 AM

I like this one a lot. Good work.

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"Despite all my rage, I am still just a rat in a cage."
-Billy Corgan-

poetFemmeFatale
Member Elite

since 1999-07-25

Posts 2646
Arkansas

4 posted 1999-10-24 09:51 AM

This has got to be my favorite one yet !! There are several lines in here that really make this beautiful and almost haunting....very nicely done - I like how your poetry just starts "flowing" into a story, and by the time you finish it, you do so with a bang ! very nice....

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I beckon you to come...I lure you with my tongue... - poet FemmeFatale

hoot_owl_rn
Member Patricius

since 1999-07-05

Posts 10750
Glen Hope, PA USA

5 posted 1999-10-24 10:43 AM

Wow, the meter and rhyme work for this poem and bring it across wonderfully

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