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The Ship
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The Ship |
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RSEvans Senior Member
since 1999-10-23
Posts 1147Tulsa, OK, USA 
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Casting my soul afloat into the Sea of Life: "What orders Captain? Ahead full or come about, prepare to fire?" I am immobile with no wind to fill my sails. I have no star to guide by. "Watch the rocks helmsman!" "Guide clear of that reef!" The water beneath my soul boils and seeths, And threatens to draw me under, Because of cracks and holes Cause by many an unsuccessful meeting With other souls. "What orders, Captain? Should I head for port?" "Not yet, Helmsman. Prepare to come about." Although battered and scarred, I will not set this ship to dock. As though this may be the Last Encounter My intuition tells me to abort this course. But I will not yield, They'll have to shoot me down, For this soul will go out fighting, And her captain will not abandon her. "What orders Captain?" "Fire at will!!!" --Forgive the punctuation...hard to verse this one-- |
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Watcher666 Senior Member
since 1999-10-13
Posts 1606 |
Well done,punctuations and all.Like the analogy of life and sailing. ------------------ Illusion...what we see and what we do...it's all up to you. |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
This is great! I enjoyed this one very much!  ------------------ Denise |
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poetFemmeFatale Member Elite
since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646Arkansas |
A very interesting approach to a very emotional expression! Really made it "frustrating" !! hehe I like this one alot! Do you have any poetry in that notebook that I WON'T like ??? LOL Keep writing, dear brother !! ------------------ I beckon you to come...I lure you with my tongue... - poet FemmeFatale |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
What a grand finish to this piece ------------------ This is courage...to bear unflinchingly what heaven sends. ~Eurpides |
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