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The Rain Outside My Window Falls (my way of getting things off my mind. enjoy) |
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Starith Member
since 1999-08-18
Posts 176Leesburg, FL USA |
As the rain outside my window falls My thoughts walk through unseen halls Behind the doors with in my mind Unimaginable fears churn and grind Fears of love lost and gone Fears of waking alone in the dawn My thoughts turn down another corridor I can feel myself held in your arms once more You hold me tight and kiss my lips My eyes closed tight but one tear slips I wake from this dream, staining my cheeks are tears I gasp for breath as my hope is choked away by fears In the darkness silence calls As the rain outside my window falls ------------------ We are only truly apperciated after we are no more! |
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Very cool imagery...I love this. ------------------ Michael Anderson Is all that we see or seem but a dream within a dream? |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
cool imagery indeed Starith, loved it also  ------------------ What comes from the heart goes to the heart. Samuel Coleridge |
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Watcher666 Senior Member
since 1999-10-13
Posts 1606 |
Enjoy I did! Well done! ------------------ Illusion...what we see and what we do...it's all up to you. |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
So sad  |
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Trynete Junior Member
since 1999-09-01
Posts 35Cape Cod, MA |
{CLAP CLAP} WOW!!! (tear drop) You most certainly have rather true and rare talent. Excellent job, man I admire YOU!!! ------------------ To live is to love, and to love is to live... the meaning of life. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Starith, Enjoyed the read. |
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Starith Member
since 1999-08-18
Posts 176Leesburg, FL USA |
Wow! I never expected to have this many replies when I signed on this morning. Thank you all. Micheal: I still can't believe that you find my poems interesting and worth your praise. I am glad that they touch you as they do. Dark Angel: Thank you I'm glad that you enjoyed this. Watcher: Thank you also! Hoot: I did not mean for this to make you sad I'm so sorry that I did. I had to get things off my mind, not meant to be sad at all. Trynete: I am glad you enjoyed this. Thank you. Seymour: Thank you also. You guys are gonna fill my head with the crazy idea that I'm good at this or something..LOL. Thank you all again. ------------------ We are only truly apperciated after we are no more! |
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Skyfyre Senior Member
since 1999-08-15
Posts 1906Sitting in Michael's Lap |
I love the rain ... For that reason alone, this poem is well worth the read. However, there are many other reasons why I had to read it several times over, relishing it more each time. My favorite of all is how you began and ended with the same line: it completed the image of the mind wandering, then coming back to reality. I am impressed! --Kesslynne ------------------ You cannot choose the way of your death, but the path you choose will determine its own end. |
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Emmy Member
since 1999-06-29
Posts 194KY |
WOW! That was too cool! I love the amazing imagery; you've captured a wandering mind perfectly. You've got talent! |
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Skyfyre Senior Member
since 1999-08-15
Posts 1906Sitting in Michael's Lap |
My friend, you just keep getting better and better. You'd better stop that ... you know I don't like competition! Though I have already told you how much I love this, allow me to reiterate: I LOVE THIS! Nocht ------------------ "Nunc lento sonitu dicunt, morierus" (Now as I hear this bell tolling softly for another, it says to me, "Thou must die.") |
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Starith Member
since 1999-08-18
Posts 176Leesburg, FL USA |
Thank you all so very much. Boy oh boy it seems I did well on this one. Skyfyre: I am impressed myself. Impressed by the fact that my poetry could envoke such a reaction from anyone. I am overwhelmed thank you. Emmy: Thank you very much. I'm so glad that you liked this. Nocht: Dear friend I'd never dream of giving you competition...LOL. Thank you for your reply...you know I hold your thoughts of my work very high. Thank you again my friend.Star ------------------ We are only truly apperciated after we are no more! |
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RainbowGirl Member Elite
since 1999-07-31
Posts 3023United Kingdom |
The sound and sight of rain can evoke so many memories.. HUGS ------------------ You give but little when you give of your possessions. It is when you give of yourself that you truly give. |
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Starith Member
since 1999-08-18
Posts 176Leesburg, FL USA |
Very true Rainbow. I love the rain. It helps me to unwind. Thank you all again for your wonerful praise. Star ------------------ We are only truly apperciated after we are no more! |
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