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~Art of the Soul~
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~Art of the Soul~ |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704
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~ Art of the Soul ~ Wild flight across the horizon has drawn me to your footsteps. Elusively, I haunt your shadows, roaming places you walk unseen, enraptured in your light - for no yearning sun could paint a shadow only love can cast alone. Now, here, underneath Eros' bright blessing, I am found, gently sketching my soul, realising forever in strokes and breaths, I etch without need of any brush, for my half is tinctured just - and even Yemen's arid heart could thrive by the sustaining colours of your loving art. O my dove, your shadows are not so dark! Unshuttered demons surface still, yet even they limn the illustrations of your soul - I'd dream their flight away to paint you peace, if order was your desire, but such penumbra is ever a part of the half of you: I could not erase sweet anything from your masterpiece. Da Vinci and Van Gogh knew not the passion wrought by colour of a fired heart, and, to think, my easel knows only mere shadows of you yet! Love crafts here now, and you; yes: Love's art abides in me, enduring past eternity. 20.10.99 [This message has been edited by Severn (edited 01-06-2000).] |
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DreamEvil Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 2396 |
A little early for voyeurism I see, but that's okay. I don't think Christopher will mind if I a bit early. Very complex and well done piece my friend, it likes me much. ------------------ Now and forever, my heart hears ~one voice~. DreamEvil© |
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Watcher666 Senior Member
since 1999-10-13
Posts 1606 |
Excellent,well done verse! Chris is very lucky to have found you. ------------------ Illusion...what we see and what we do...it's all up to you. |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Dream - thanks dear friend! Watcher - and luck is overrated! I just think it's destiny - thankyou!!!  |
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Serraley Junior Member
since 1999-10-09
Posts 11New Zealand |
Ok, WOW! (And, yes, I did notice it was an acrostic. Are you proud of me?) Stunning, heartsister. My only criticism (am I allowed to give one?) is that the first verse has only one fullstop - I got a little exhausted reading it! But other than that... **WOW!** |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Severn, Were you are my soul does dwell. A deep and passionate work, proud of you on this one. |
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Pepper Member Elite
since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079Southern Florida |
A wonderful read Severn! I enjoyed this alot........ ------------------ May your days be filled with lots of sunshine and your nights lit up by golden moonbeams |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Severn ..wonderfully crafted and oh so beautiful....imagine the pictures you will paint with word once you finally meet "Da Vinci and Van Gogh knew not the passion Wrought by colour of a fired heart, and, to think," Oh, I do like those lines |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Thankyou everyone - it was hard work!! And Serra - you ever were one for punctuation... Sey - thanks - that means alot! |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
A wonderful acrostic, Severn. blessings to you and Chris. ------------------ Michael Anderson Is all that we see or seem but a dream within a dream? |
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A Romantic Heart Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-03
Posts 5496Forever In Your Heart |
I think the best poetry comes from the heart!Doesn't matter about all the little stuff, it is the chosen words and their meaning from the depths of ones soul, to bring out to light, their deepest emotions. You have done a wonderful job on this one! I Liked it very much! Your heart and soul does speak! |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
It is a gift like this that makes me happy to be alive. That I could prompt such inspiration is beyond my ken, and likely will ever be. I feel honored, blessed, loved and more, by this K. You are indeed the greatest blessing in my life, one which has become much brighter as of late! This epic work of art only scrathes the surface though my heart, for we have many many more stanzas to add to it! |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
hoot - your time is drawing close - soon you will be painting each other's souls yes? pepper - thanks! Michael - thankyou - for the compliment and the blessings - I'm so blessed already, don't know how much more I can hold! RH - thanks! I live by my soul and heart. My dove - You will ever be my inspiration - you'll just have to adjust to the fact...! I love you. K. |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Severn...11 days, oh boy.....looking forward to filling the canvas |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Severn, your words have left me speechless. Soooooo beautiful. And such a complex piece of writing! Very well done. ...ooops, forgot to say great acrostic! ------------------ Denise [This message has been edited by dsnyder (edited 10-24-1999).] |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
So well done. I really enjoyed reading this. |
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Skyfyre Senior Member
since 1999-08-15
Posts 1906Sitting in Michael's Lap |
Absolutely stunning in every respect. I am speechless, and that is a rare occasion indeed. My hat, were I wearing one, would be off to you. --Kesslynne ------------------ You cannot choose the way of your death, but the path you choose will determine its own end. |
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RainbowGirl Member Elite
since 1999-07-31
Posts 3023United Kingdom |
Severn: Superb!.. HUGS ------------------ You give but little when you give of your possessions. It is when you give of yourself that you truly give. |
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IsabelleSkye Member
since 1999-06-27
Posts 253 |
And after you meet will the colors on your palette be longing, desire, passion, devotion, and happiness? I hope so. Fairy tales come true, in odd ways sometimes, but WOW! they do!! I wish you all the happiness I experienced in my meeting not long ago, but less of the suffering tho'. *sigh* Good Luck! I.Skye P.S. wonderful poem (said rather jealously LOL for my acrostics are nothing but irritants when I attempt them LOL) ------------------ "With love's light wings did I o'er-perch these walls; for stony limits cannot hold love out; and what love can do that dares love attempt." Romeo & Juliet Act II |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Oh wow - you guys are just so great! Ruth - again I have to say I am so jealous... Denise - thankyou! Bouncing here... Martie - thanks! Skyfyre - wow. Thankyou so much - blushing... RG - hugs to you too, you huggy thing. I.Skye - I think it will be almost a literal explosion! Hope the suffering wasn't/isn't too hard? |
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