Dancing in the Garden of my Night

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DreamEvil
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since 1999-06-22

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0 posted 1999-07-02 02:30 AM

Walking through the garden of my soul,
I am struck by a singular thing.
I find,
as I wind
between fountains and flowering Shrubs,
the colors are muted at night.

All the colors of my life
don't even rate as pastels,
red roses seem black,
white mums seem gray.
Gone are the colors
that once brought delight.

There is beauty
in my garden still,
not seen by the eye.
The rustling of leaves,
heady perfume,
gentle breeze
like a lover's sigh.

The rich smell of loam
from a fertile mind,
even the weeds
contribute to the grace,
wild and tangled
and filled with many needs.

I sit by the sundial,
useless thing,
waiting for the clouds to break,
and with them bring
the only thing
to make my heart ache.

From over the lake,
Moonlight streams,
brightening my garden with her glow.
All the colors seem to bleed and flow
Into my dreams you know.

Tonight though,
my Moonlight
causes me fright.
There is a dimness,
a darkening of her light.
For all she has given me,
it is only right,
I will take her dancing
in my garden tonight.

©1999 DreamEvil
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Patience is a virtue, but virtue has never been one of my redeeming qualities.

[This message has been edited by DreamEvil (edited 12-15-1999).]

Moonlight
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since 1999-06-25

Posts 105
Auburn, Alabama USA

1 posted 1999-07-02 02:32 AM

I really love this one.
Even the title is beautiful.
And the whole idea and story is really good.
Beautiful!
~m~

one voice
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since 1999-06-29

Posts 38
Billings, MT USA

2 posted 1999-07-02 02:34 AM

I have to agree with Moonlight... I really like this poem as well. It is very vivid...I can see it in my mind's eye.

Alain DeLaCendres
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since 1999-07-02

Posts 119
Ohio

3 posted 1999-07-02 02:36 AM

Very nice. It kind of reminded me of a dream..beautiful imagery, I thought you brought those colors to life.

azblond
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since 1999-07-01

Posts 637
The Steamy Desert

4 posted 1999-07-02 02:39 AM

Wow...what to say that the others haven't except that I agree 100%...you touched me and took me with you into the dance. Thank you for allowing me to share.

DreamEvil
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since 1999-06-22

Posts 2396

5 posted 1999-07-02 02:46 AM

Thank you all for your response. It still amazes me that anyone likes these slices of Darkness.

Heartfelt adoration for you as always Moonlight.

Krystal
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since 1999-06-19

Posts 140
Shelton,WA USA

6 posted 1999-07-02 03:21 PM

I loved the whole poem, and especially loved the title and last line... beautifully done!

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Shannon D. Montgomery
("Krystal")

DreamEvil
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since 1999-06-22

Posts 2396

7 posted 1999-07-03 01:19 AM

Thank you Krystal, high praise indeed.

Augchic711
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since 1999-06-17

Posts 80
O'Fallon, IL, USA

8 posted 1999-07-03 02:04 AM

Wow Dreamevil you are such a wonderful poet, to think that you could ever enjoy my poems although you write so wonderfully has made me feel so wonderful! I appreciate your compliments and you deserve such honor with this poem it's beautiful and paints the most glorious picture in a persons mind! THANK YOU SO MUCH!!! I look forward to reading your poems and thank you again!

*******Augchic711*******

DreamEvil
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since 1999-06-22

Posts 2396

9 posted 1999-07-03 02:13 AM

Why I'm getting this response baffles me. I don't mean to repeat myself, but...Why?

Not that I'm complaining!!

Artur Hawkwing
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since 1999-06-30

Posts 444
USA

10 posted 1999-07-03 02:30 AM

Maybe it's because of your enduring and different poetic qualities?

I enjoyed this one too, it paints such a vivid picture. You are similar to being a Pablo Picasso of poetry.

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Artur Hawkwing.... 'The grave is no bar to my call.' Horn of Valere

[This message has been edited by Artur Hawkwing (edited 07-03-99).]

DreamEvil
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since 1999-06-22

Posts 2396

11 posted 1999-07-03 03:00 AM

Thank you, very much. I'm trying to write pieces that cause emotion, Picasso I'm not, but I appreciate the comparison.

ac
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since 1999-06-17

Posts 129
Cayey, PR - USA

12 posted 1999-07-03 11:32 AM

I don't see why you're baffled or even surprised...it's beautiful the way you've made a moment of your life flow into a garden...impressive and touching...keep stirring those emotions...

[This message has been edited by ac (edited 07-05-99).]

Balladeer

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since 1999-06-05

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Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA

13 posted 1999-07-03 08:13 PM

Just the fact that you would take the fact that colors are muted at night and weave it into a poem of quality is reason enough for high praise.

DreamEvil
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since 1999-06-22

Posts 2396

14 posted 1999-07-04 01:02 AM

Validation is a wonderful thing, the praise touches what light there is in me. Thank you both.

Lil Angel
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since 1999-07-03

Posts 21

15 posted 1999-07-04 02:01 AM

I thought you did an awesome job.You have a talent.I liked the poem a lot.I hope you write poems for a long time it was a pleasure to read.

DreamEvil
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since 1999-06-22

Posts 2396

16 posted 1999-07-04 02:26 AM

Thank you, my dear. Praise, I'm always willing to hear.

thursdayschild
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since 1999-07-01

Posts 169
Houston, Tx.

17 posted 1999-12-14 11:50 PM

You already know the emotion this one invokes...truly, a wonderful piece.

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