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A Lost Soul |
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Deanna New Member
since 1999-06-27
Posts 7WV, USA |
You feel the tension mounting; You watch confusion reign. You say you don't know what is wrong, You wonder if you're sane. Your dreams, you don't remember, You just want to withdraw; Since there are no easy answers, You just build another wall. There are some who see things clearly, Of those, I am now a part; Not because of what I share with you, But because I listen with my heart. And it's sad to see you struggle, Trying hard to find your way. I want so much to help you, But there's nothing I can say. For you must find your answers, They're all lying deep within. And if you listen to your soul, You will find your heart again. |
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Lost Dreamer Member Elite
since 1999-06-20
Posts 2464Somewhere near the Rainbow |
WOW,I really liked the way you put this one together. |
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Deanna New Member
since 1999-06-27
Posts 7WV, USA |
Thank you Lost Dreamer, your words are encouraging |
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sea_of_okc Senior Member
since 1999-06-15
Posts 568Oklahoma City, OK, USA |
Deanna, I really like this poem. I can definitely relate... it is hard to see a friend struggling to find the truth but you are correct that there is nothing you can do. Everyone has to discover their own truth or how can it be real to them? Thank you for sharing this poem.  |
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Andrew Scott Member Elite
since 1999-06-24
Posts 2558Redlands,CA,USA |
Nicely done. I like the way it flows. Gentle and supportive, with a relative message. |
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Deanna New Member
since 1999-06-27
Posts 7WV, USA |
I thank you both for your lovely comments. sea_of_okc - This poem was the only thing I could do. |
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kebeth New Member
since 1999-07-01
Posts 8California |
this poem really made me think about the truth and by seeing someone one else struggling to find the answers, you see your own answers. |
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Elizabeth
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Member Ascendant
since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
Here this one goes again-TGTBHATB! (Too Good To Be Hidden At The Bottom!) |
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r. baker33 Member
since 1999-07-03
Posts 55glen easton wv |
wow i finally got to read this poem i've heard so much about.i've got to stop crying i'm getting the keyboard all soggy. it's the truth somtimes people can't see what others do because there too close to a certain situation.i am certain this poem has helped more than one lost soul.thank you so very much.for this beautiful piece of work. all expression is eunique each as the peddles of a beautiful flower. Richard |
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deannamarie Junior Member
since 1999-07-26
Posts 43WI |
I've been in those situations (so frustrating!) and liked the way this was written. Deanna |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
great job, Deanna!!! You really nailed it - it flows so well. |
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Deanna New Member
since 1999-06-27
Posts 7WV, USA |
I really appreciate everyone's comments. This poem was a result of the frustration that comes from having to take a passive role while watching someone close to you struggle and suffer. Richard, you could learn as much as your brother, the choice is yours! |
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r. baker33 Member
since 1999-07-03
Posts 55glen easton wv |
sweetie i am one ahead of ya i already have, and thanks.that is why i sent the last message.your one in a million! |
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elvira Senior Member
since 1999-07-06
Posts 936California |
a lovely sentiment and so very true, we can truly only ever help ourselves when it comes to finding our way in life  ------------------ If I had my mouth I would bite. If I had my liberty I would do my liking. In the mean time, let me be that I am, and seek not to alter me. ~Shakespeare~ |
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