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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) 
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Don’t light a candle for my remorse I’ll chase my dreams on endless course And never wonder where they alight But dream your fingertips tonight Through fields of fresh cut flowers mourn That I should wake and thus stillborn And for every fallen daffodil I wish my dreams would lay me still Missing pieces found at last Now I know what might have passed Now I see what’s black and white But blessed with all the colors bright I love a nightmare to bathe in sweat I love a sin I can’t regret A nursery rhyme that’s out of whack Point your finger and three point back I love you and you love me I love a dream where I’m still free Dreams are my imaginary friends Dreams and I love to pretend ----Only in dreams Beautiful dreams Roy Orbison [This message has been edited by wayoutwalt (edited 06-26-99).] [This message has been edited by wayoutwalt (edited 06-26-99).] |
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Christina Myers Member
since 1999-06-21
Posts 159 |
a lot of great images in this piece, walt.. I especially like " a nursey rhyme that's out of whack -point your finger and three point back." -C |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
thanks Christina I don't know why i put it in there but it just felt like apart of my dreams whacked out nursery rhymes. I love nightmares the most they can be a great thrill ride. |
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Poet deVine
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since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Excellent! Loved every line of this one...I also dream..too much some say...and thanks for the Roy Orbison quote...now I want to dig out my oldies and listen to him!  |
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Wolfgang Member
since 1999-05-24
Posts 124Hamilton, Ont. Canada |
I'm with de Vine here. Love the whole damn thing! 4 aces for the line "I love a sin I can't regret" great stuff |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
This is VERY good, Walt! You are quite the talented poet. Rhyme, meter, all well executed. And the message.... excellent! Keep writing and posting! |
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Nan
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since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
"In dreams I walk with you In dreams I talk with you In dreams you're mine All of the time In beautiful Dreams......."  |
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Moonlight Member
since 1999-06-25
Posts 105Auburn, Alabama USA |
enchanting! I really liked this one... ~m o o n l i g h t~ ------------------ www.auburn.edu/~fergum1 ~*Only when it is dark enough can you see the stars*~ |
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sheba57 Member
since 1999-06-27
Posts 64vincennes, in usa |
walt - i loved the poem! too, like wolfgang, like the line, "i love a sin i can't regret." that one just really jumped out at me. you are a very talented writer. keep sending more! ~ celtic rose ~ |
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Newguy Junior Member
since 1999-06-27
Posts 36Moultrie, GA, USA |
This is a really good poem that inspires and teaches everyone! The rhyme and layout are wonderful, as well as the imagery. Congratulations and please keep the poems coming! |
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Lost Dreamer Member Elite
since 1999-06-20
Posts 2464Somewhere near the Rainbow |
This deserved another chance at the top. |
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~one voice~ Senior Member
since 1999-07-08
Posts 664Billings, MT USA |
Walt...thank you for sharing this piece tonight. I really enjoyed it, and I needed something to lift my spirits a bit! Thanks dear friend!  ~one voice~ |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
I am so glad this came around again. I missed it the first time. Very nicely done, Walt. |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
wow im sooo glad poets are diggin deep i almost forgot this one its a fav thanx for liftin it up |
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Dragon Member
since 1999-07-14
Posts 138Highmount,NY ,USA |
EXCELLLENT!!! |
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