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The Sober Son
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The Sober Son |
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Mr_Squint Junior Member
since 1999-06-27
Posts 17Bankstown, New South Wales, Australia |
My Mother? Dead. My father? The convicted. My life? Ruined. I can’t even walk down the street Before I break down and weep. All I have left is my mind Because my eyes are so blind; My hands so cold; My ears like mould. I can only think of the trees Holding the crisp breeze. Think about the sunset. No goals of mine have been met. I have to get away from this pain Hop on a Sydney train And run from my tears Bad memories from all these years. My dad has been jailed. Because my mother’s life has failed. Left by myself all alone No communication but a phone No one to teach me to laugh Or even to have a bath. No one to wake me with the sun-rise. My agony comes with no surprise. When I pat a dog on its head I have no feeling and think its dead. With my soda there is no cream. When I sleep there is no dream. If I want I cannot smile Because my happiness is not versatile. I look in the fridge there’s nothing to eat; I look outside there’s no one to meet. I go to school everyday And learn as I may. But there’s is no pride and joy Because I am not considered a boy. Who can I call a friend? Everyone has left once again. Who are these people that teach? What they do is preach. They say that we are alive, happy and free. Can they teach when they don’t even know me. Look at my life it’s a mess. Look at me can’t even dress. ------------------ A mailman was mailing mailmen to other mailmen so these mailmen could mail these mailmen in a mail truck that didn't mail mail but mailed men!!! |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Welcome Aboard, Mr. Squint I'm very happy to see that we're represented "Down Under"  ------------------ Nan's Morsels netpoets.net/nan/index.html |
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Fred Hobbs Member
since 1999-06-08
Posts 329Tallahassee, Florida, US |
Welcome Mr. Squint (Great name!) Your poem is well written and well taken. Hope to hear more from you. sandman |
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elvira Senior Member
since 1999-07-06
Posts 936California |
what a gripping poem...i hope you are on auto e-mail notification...do come back and post more please!  ------------------ Childhood Memories...your countenance...hoarse whispers...My One and Only...Tribute to M.J... serving wench...stolen hours...devotion...Master...apart... |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
And your "up" poem would be.....??? ------------------ Sunshine Words will always express our feelings true. ~~~ KRJ Look, then, into thine heart, and write ~~~ Henry Wadsworth Longfellow |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Welcome to the family. Went to your website, but didn't see any poetry posted there! You should at least post this one!  |
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Mr_Squint Junior Member
since 1999-06-27
Posts 17Bankstown, New South Wales, Australia |
Hey guys/gals!!! -> Thanx for the boost of confidence!!! => Sure my poem may have been a little on the 'gloomy' side but I wrote this poem when I was feeling that way ~> I find it brings out your TRUE emotions -> And no Sunsshine, I don't alwayz write this way...Just take a look at my signature => Hope you have a few tears and laughs ~> After all, what is this world without some mixed feelings every now and again!?!? ------------------ A mailman was mailing mailmen to other mailmen so these mailmen could mail these mailmen in a mail truck that didn't mail mail but mailed men!!! - Mr_Squint |
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Mr_Squint Junior Member
since 1999-06-27
Posts 17Bankstown, New South Wales, Australia |
Hey Poet deVine, I just noticed your post straight after I posted my last one and thought I'd reply to yours -> I'm glad you liked my poem and sorry 'bout the web page => I believe that poetry is not neccessarily set out in verses and stanzas but it is the manipulation of words to create or evoke an emotion ~> And in my new web page you should get an emotion that makes you laugh or makes you think that I'm some sort of losty!!! -> It's at http://www.geocities.com/tokyo/highrise/4112/ Enojy and I hope you'll be kind enough to send it to anyone you know that has a sense of humor!!! ------------------ A mailman was mailing mailmen to other mailmen so these mailmen could mail these mailmen in a mail truck that didn't mail mail but mailed men!!! |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Dear Mr_Squint I'm sorry to say I spoke right away and didn't deliver the humor right; just so you know, I read your prose and looking for more for insight. It was well done. Sorry I didn't get that across to you...sometimes I think anyone can read my mind, and it's only me listening to the whispers in my head. Looking forward to much, much more. |
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Mr_Squint Junior Member
since 1999-06-27
Posts 17Bankstown, New South Wales, Australia |
Greetings Sunshine -> I'm glad to be glad that you're glad about my poem => I saw the sunny side of your reply but I just wasn't sure if you liked it or not ~> I am currently working on another poem thanx to the numerous replies that I've received -> But I DO feel kind of wierd being a 16-turning-17 year old poet!!! => Still, I'll try to keep the poems coming ~> Sorry if I'm going to dissapoint you but the next poem isn't very 'up' -> It's just that I find more emotional-realtions with the 'down' kind of poems!!! => So, I'm sorry about that. |
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elvira Senior Member
since 1999-07-06
Posts 936California |
your poetry is great....do save it....i wrote as a teen, and didn't....still regret that....glad you came back  ------------------ Childhood Memories...your countenance...hoarse whispers...My One and Only...Tribute to M.J... serving wench...stolen hours...devotion...Master...apart... |
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Lost Dreamer Member Elite
since 1999-06-20
Posts 2464Somewhere near the Rainbow |
I thought your poem was excellent, and would also like to say welcome to our family. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Squint, I wrote many dark poems as a young teen...and I am looking forward to seeing many more postings from you. We're all simply glad to have you here. GB, Sunshine. |
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Mr_Squint Junior Member
since 1999-06-27
Posts 17Bankstown, New South Wales, Australia |
O so many people with O so many nice things to say about my poem!!! -> I never really thought about writing poetry for fun!!! => But I AM doing it!!! ~> And with your support behind me, I'll continue to write many more works -> One that's already done is "Touched Unlike An Angel" => Do a search for it, and I hope you all enjoy it as much as I enjoyed writing it!!! |
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