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chris Junior Member
since 1999-06-23
Posts 29rowlett, texas, usa |
a touch and a whisper set my mind at ease for a moment in time i had something to believe now the touch has gone away keep holding on to yesterday everything's fading, except the pain i've lost it all, now nothing to gain passing each minute not thinking of the next all that's done, is only reflex my heart, my life, my all have gone deceiving others saying,"nothing's wrong" but the emptiness is growing so fast done all i can and won't let go of the past now death would mean nothing, i'm already dead but leaving this place would leave the darkness unfed waiting impatiently for days to end night time has become my closest friend alone in the blackness i search for the soul that captured my dreams and won't let go voices i've created, deceiving myself can't get close to anyone else i've traveled so far into this hell creating my world in this place i fell a world of hatred, how can it be the one i despise has always been me filling myself with nothing but lies how could she leave without saying good-bye where has she gone, why did she leave will she ever come back and return my dream |
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Krystal Member
since 1999-06-19
Posts 140Shelton,WA USA |
Very nicely done, Chris. I enjoy all of your work, this one especially touched me because I can relate to it. Beautiful work. ------------------ Shannon D. Montgomery ("Krystal") |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
Pretty tough, huh Chris, when your so wrapped up in someone that when all at once they're gone, your world feels so empty. You did a very nice job relaying those feelings here. You have a definitive talent with meter within the lines. Keep up the good work. |
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chris Junior Member
since 1999-06-23
Posts 29rowlett, texas, usa |
miss peri- thank you very much for your response... as for the meter....i'm a drummer |
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invertigo18 Member
since 1999-06-14
Posts 53Prairieville, LA., USA |
I can really relate to this one. I feel very much the same way at times. And I do have to say that I'm quite jealous. You posted your message and three people responded immediately! You must have a following.  ------------------ Luke Cakalic |
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MuseFaire Junior Member
since 1999-06-27
Posts 12 |
I really like the feeling that is portrayed in this poem. Sometimes this subject can come across empty because it is something we all feel at one time or another, but you bring real depth and emotion to it. Great job. -the muse- |
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elvira Senior Member
since 1999-07-06
Posts 936California |
what a lovely poem...hope you are still posting? ------------------ Childhood Memories...your countenance...hoarse whispers...My One and Only...Tribute to M.J... serving wench...stolen hours...devotion...Master...apart... |
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