Open Poetry #1 |
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Innocence Captured |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) ![]() |
For more than a century this frame Captures the innocence of my youth And though I no longer have a name Time cannot take away the truth I've fought so many battles in this bloody war I can't recall what it is that I am fighting for This rifle is an extension of my being The dark side of my soul I never knew And it does me good not ever seeing The atrocities that I do Now I pose for this picture at the close of this war Brother against his brother not so innocent anymore |
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Krystal Member
since 1999-06-19
Posts 140Shelton,WA USA |
Ooohhhh wow!! It was all very good, but I especially liked the last two lines, very powerful! ------------------ Shannon D. Montgomery ("Krystal") |
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Lost Dreamer Member Elite
since 1999-06-20
Posts 2464Somewhere near the Rainbow |
wayoutwalt, Wow, this is powerful. |
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Dragoness Senior Member
since 1999-08-07
Posts 513 |
Walt....loved this WOW!! ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ------------------ Set you heart free and your mind will follow. |
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Emmy Member
since 1999-06-29
Posts 194KY |
I was guessing it would be good just by the title (which is really not a fair assumption to make) but i was right!!! WOW!!! this really hit hard |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
DANG! How many of these beauties have I missed the first time around? This is brilliant, Walt. Thank you. |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Wonderfully written Walt!! |
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poetFemmeFatale Member Elite
since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646Arkansas |
Aaaahhh I see you captured me....wait.....no....that was not it at all......sorry, I thought this was about me....(the title and all ?) LOL Very nice piece, and yes, very powerful as everyone else said! I've been telling everyone how innocent I am, and well, you know, I thought ..........never mind !! ![]() ------------------ - poet FemmeFatale "The strongest man in the world is he who stands most alone..." Henrik Ibsen (1826-1906) Norwegian dramatist lyric poet |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
thanks so much to lost dreamer for diggin up this one i get lil tear yuh for the oldies and i never thought i'd see her again but losty brought her back to me |
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redwriter1 Member
since 1999-07-22
Posts 480Franklin, TN |
Much said, it so few words..!! Excellent. Simply and elegantly written. ------------------ Kay-lynn **A dream is a wish your heart makes :) |
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DreamEvil Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 2396 |
Way to rock, walt!! ------------------ Shall I indulge in flights of fancy hampered by clipped wings? DreamEvil© |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Awesome - ever read Wilfred Owen? Oh - what's braingum????!!!!! |
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