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Self-deceit (my first pantoum)
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Self-deceit (my first pantoum) |
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DreamEvil Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 2396 |
I creep through this life unheard and unseen. A woman's touch is forbidden treasure. When close to a woman I feel unclean. Their disdain I receive in full measure. A woman's touch is forbidden treasure. My fears heighten my desire all the more. Their disdain I receive in full measure. Quiet disregard evens each old score. My fears heighten my desire all the more. Even their scorn is a heady delight. Quiet disregard evens each old score. Passion prevents my return to the Night. Even their scorn is a heady delight. Much of my worth is based on self-deceit. Passion prevents my return to the Night. Women have made this deception complete. Much of my worth is based on self-deceit. This lie has been uncovered just in time. Women have made this deception complete. I now unravel that lie with my rhyme. This lie has been uncovered just in time. When close to a woman I feel unclean. I now unravel that lie with my rhyme. I creep through this life unheard and unseen. ©1999 DreamEvil ------------------ Shall I indulge in flights of fancy hampered by clipped wings? DreamEvil© |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
DreamEvil, I enjoyed your Pantoum very much It is a subject I would not have picked but you did well. By the way did you get my anwser to your Email? |
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Gentle Soul Member
since 1999-07-12
Posts 273Vinton,Ohio USA |
Dream have I told you lately how good of a poet you are? ------------------ Gënt£ë¤§°û£ |
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Nicole Senior Member
since 1999-06-23
Posts 1835Florida |
Such a well written pantoum...such a distressing subject. You projected the feelings very well. ------------------ "Grief can take care of itself, but to get the full value of joy you must have somebody to divide it with." *Mark Twain* |
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Dragoness Senior Member
since 1999-08-07
Posts 513 |
Nicely done,brother.Welcome home!  ------------------ Set you heart free and your mind will follow. |
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IsabelleSkye Member
since 1999-06-27
Posts 253 |
WOW! That was an incredible read...I wanna write one too..*grabbing pen* Too kewl DE, glad yer back my friend Izzy ------------------ "I would rather sit on a pumpkin, and have it all to myself, than to be crowded on a velvet cushion." .....Henry David Thoreau |
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pen of passion Member
since 1999-08-11
Posts 234 |
DreamEvil, I'm your greatest fan. |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
This one kind of twisted here, blame it all on us won't you! hehe |
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~one voice~ Senior Member
since 1999-07-08
Posts 664Billings, MT USA |
Very excellent! I enjoy watching your talent grow every day. ------------------ ~onevoice~ "She looked at her life like lines, never-ending, constantly forming, reforming and bending." |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
You got this format down, DE - now onto the next...... |
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DreamEvil Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 2396 |
Thank you everyone, I was hesitant about posting a new style. Nan, thank you immensely and I'm eagerly awaiting a new challenge. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
DE, Wonderful pantoum You da man. |
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Rita Member
since 1999-07-19
Posts 55Danville Va. 24540 |
again, well written, beautiful again. ------------------ "And the day came, where the risk to remain tight in a bud, was more painful than the risk it took to blossom" |
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