Me, Lloyd, and the Cosmic Void

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Open Poetry #1

Me, Lloyd, and the Cosmic Void

wayoutwalt
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since 1999-06-22

Posts 4870
TEXAS (it's all big)

0 posted 1999-06-24 01:20 AM

There is a big black hole opening up in my bedroom wall.
My closet door cannot keep me from a bottomless fall.
There goes my dog and, oh great, there goes my cat.
Teacher won’t believe where my homework is at.
This thing happened to my closest friend Lloyd.
That poor guy got sucked into a cosmic void.
And not a soul has seen him since that day.
I think that I would like to keep it that way!
All of those scary stories must be true.
If mom was here what would she do?
She’d say, “That’s the way it goes.”
She'd at least scratch my nose.
As this poem is getting dumb.
Fingers are becoming numb.
Not much longer I’ll hold on.
Miss me while I am gone.
Oh noooooooooo!
Gotta gooooo.
(Sigh)
Bye

[This message has been edited by wayoutwalt (edited 06-24-99).]

[This message has been edited by wayoutwalt (edited 08-26-99).]

owen
Junior Member

since 1999-06-17

Posts 19
Toledo, WA USA

1 posted 1999-06-24 02:19 AM

Trippy is good. I once got stuck in a cosmic void, then I got a divorced.

owen

Nan

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Member Seraphic

since 1999-05-20

Posts 21191
Cape Cod Massachusetts USA

2 posted 1999-06-24 10:35 AM

I love fun and silly poems.....

doreen peri
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since 1999-05-25

Posts 3812
Virginia

3 posted 1999-06-24 12:10 PM

Ditto Nan.
You be the man!
Cool little song.
Not too long.
Liked how the woids
drift to cosmic voids.

Balladeer

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since 1999-06-05

Posts 25505
Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA

4 posted 1999-06-24 02:37 PM

That's way out, Walt. If poetry is a combination of imagination and innovation, I'd say you struck the bullseye dead square! Very enjoyable. Thanks!

Krystal
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since 1999-06-19

Posts 140
Shelton,WA USA

5 posted 1999-06-24 03:56 PM

Nice work! I really enjoyed the staggered words... that was a refreshing change of pace from the ordinary! Fun, too. Thanks for sharing it with us.

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Shannon D. Montgomery
("Krystal")

Lost Dreamer
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since 1999-06-20

Posts 2464
Somewhere near the Rainbow

6 posted 1999-08-22 08:04 AM

I liked this one, rought a

to my face.

aziza
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since 2006-07-09

Posts 2995
Lumpy Oatmeal makes me Crazy!

7 posted 2007-06-20 02:40 AM

I love the title and the poem remains funny - even years later.

A

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