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The Ragdoll |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) 
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The ragdoll layed with the other on the bed The little girl chose the other instead The ragdoll looked at itself and knew why It's body was dirty it was missing an eye The new doll could wet it even could talk If it felt so it could get up and walk Or the doll sitting there just being cute Was more than the ragdoll had as a mute But when the new doll broke on its first day The ragdoll knew nothing that it could say To ease the frown on the little girl's face It knew she needed something to embrace Take me! Oh, Take me! I'm right over here Down the girl's cheek ran a shimmering tear The little girl hugged the ragdoll for awhile Both spirits were lifted on both faces a smile. |
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Christina Myers Member
since 1999-06-21
Posts 159 |
I could actually visualize this poem.. very good example of showing not telling (yes, I've been in too many creative writing classes)....made me miss my old torn up bedpals of yesteryear..mine wasn't a rag doll- but a beat up big purple bunny! |
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Saxoness
since 1999-07-18
Posts 1102Texas |
way to go.....i can see why you are so proud of this one. great imagery.........brings back memories. thanks for sharing it. ------------------ "Glory remains unaware of my neglected dwelling where alone I sing my tearful song which has charms only for me." -Charles Brugnot |
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Gentle Soul Member
since 1999-07-12
Posts 273Vinton,Ohio USA |
Oh walt.. I love it.. it put tears in my eyes.. such a great poem!! so Real!! I love it!!! ------------------ Gënt£ë¤§°û£ |
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Princess Lily Member
since 1999-07-13
Posts 149USA |
One word-WONDERFUL!! this is great.i could actually see this happening as i read it. ------------------ We see only what we want to see~unless perhaps~we believe |
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DreamEvil Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 2396 |
Keep this up and we're gonna hold you to this standard, all the time.  |
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Moonlight Member
since 1999-06-25
Posts 105Auburn, Alabama USA |
what a great subject! good story great poem, walt! |
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Dragon Member
since 1999-07-14
Posts 138Highmount,NY ,USA |
Way to go Walt! Terrific!! ------------------ |
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cruz Member
since 2000-07-18
Posts 282Dallas,Texas USA |
This litter girl realized that she had a real doll and she almosts begins to neglect her. Reminds me of Ragedy Ann and Andy! |
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