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caroline
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since 1999-08-16

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0 posted 1999-08-31 06:13 AM

Looking for the Sun

You are gold and brown
red and orange
all warmth and light
I am the blue and the green
the shades of purple
all stormy and dark
and looking for the sun

I turn to you and
find what I seek
wrapped inside a
circle of eternity
that does not
belong to me

I stand on the edge
of my thunder
and weep the rain

caroline 1999
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The only man worth your tears will never make you cry...

Sunshine

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since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

1 posted 1999-08-31 01:48 PM

I am the
gold and brown,
red and orange
all warmth and light,
colors delight
You are the blue, the green
the shades of purple
running just like maple syruple

and together we make a sweet rainbow

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Sunshine
Words will always express our feelings true. ~~~ KRJ
Look, then, into thine heart, and write ~~~ Henry Wadsworth Longfellow

caroline
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since 1999-08-16

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2 posted 1999-08-31 05:44 PM

ROTFLMAO!!!!! Ohhhhh...too cute!

Sunshine, you're a trip! Thanks!

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The only man worth your tears will never make you cry...

Andrew Scott
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since 1999-06-24

Posts 2558
Redlands,CA,USA

3 posted 1999-08-31 06:09 PM

An interesting picture to behold. Thanks for sharing the image. Know that even in the stormiest places the sun burns through on occasion.

Balladeer

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since 1999-06-05

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Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA

4 posted 1999-08-31 06:20 PM

Hey, Sunshine! Where can I get some of that maple syruple for my pancakes?

Caroline...that last stanza is brilliant.

caroline
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5 posted 1999-08-31 06:30 PM

Thanks Andrew and Balladeer

I wrote this in the middle of the night a few months back...woke up thirsty and while I got some water the poem just kind of formed in my head. I wrote it down and went back to sleep! *LOL*

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The only man worth your tears will never make you cry...

Andrew Scott
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since 1999-06-24

Posts 2558
Redlands,CA,USA

6 posted 1999-08-31 06:49 PM

I'd say that was worth waking up for. Some of my better ideas form in the shower. Maybe its a water thing. Go figure.

Skyfyre
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since 1999-08-15

Posts 1906
Sitting in Michael's Lap

7 posted 1999-08-31 08:09 PM

Hey ... where's the emoticon for the "green with envy" face..?

Good free verse is SO HARD TO WRITE (at least for me) and I love it ... caroline, this was exquisite ... what creative images ... the last stanza was nothing short of a stroke of pure poetic genius.

**applause**

Nocht

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"Nunc lento sonitu dicunt, morierus"
(Now as I hear this bell tolling softly for another, it says to me, "Thou must die.")

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26

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8 posted 2004-04-17 01:53 PM

this sounds a bit like me...love this! the last lines are fantastic!

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