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The kiss |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla 
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The Kiss I lie below a white sky. Under the light of noon. Rorsahak clouds nestle and fly. And I am near to swoon. She lies my side puckered lips And I am near to swoon. Touching her with finger tips Under the light of noon. My heart pounds from simple bliss Under the light of noon Bending down to steal a kiss And I am near to swoon. Do I dare these lips in haste Under the light of noon. Do I dare these lips to taste And I am near to swoon. My heart, I feel a miss, all In the want of a kiss. |
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Pepper Member Elite
since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079Southern Florida |
very sweet Sy ------------------ May your days be filled with lots of sunshine and your nights lit up by golden moonbeams |
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caroline Senior Member
since 1999-08-16
Posts 1218http://members.xoom.com/belladona123/index.htm |
I really enjoyed this!  Its "kissed"!------------------ The only man worth your tears will never make you cry... |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Pepper and caroline, A kiss for both of you *L* |
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Alwye
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Member Elite
since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
Beautiful...and so sweet!  ------------------ *Krista Knutson* I see the world through the loving eyes of my heart, and suffer the pain of unfulfilled visions. -- Daniel L. Miller |
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Alwye
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since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
Beautiful...and so sweet! ------------------ *Krista Knutson* I see the world through the loving eyes of my heart, and suffer the pain of unfulfilled visions. -- Daniel L. Miller |
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Skyfyre Senior Member
since 1999-08-15
Posts 1906Sitting in Michael's Lap |
Is this a particular type of poem (such as villanelle, etc) or a Tabin Original? Either way, excellent job ... the repeated lines worked really well. ------------------ "Nunc lento sonitu dicunt, morierus" (Now as I hear this bell tolling softly for another, it says to me, "Thou must die.") |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
A work suitable to inspire anyone to want to be kissed - gotta go find that man of mine! Wonderful, Seymour. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
nochtdraco and Severn, This is my own style Noch, It just felt right to me. Severn I'm sending you a kiss till that special guy come along. *L* Alwye, thank you for the double post and read. |
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moonmoon Member
since 1999-08-13
Posts 277TX , USA |
Do I qualify for a kiss too?? *wink wink* Good job Seymour.. ------------------ "No one was ever ruined from without; The final ruin comes from within.".....Amelia E. Barr |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Moonmoon, Yours I'll save for the light of the moon Thank you for the wink It made me blink. |
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snow in summer Member
since 1999-08-28
Posts 67 |
there is a particular form of poem that this is very close to... or is... i'm not sure which. it is a French word... vanenille?? that's not the word, but something like that. anyway, this is a neat use of two repeating lines that that form uses also. i enjoyed this one. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
you were good way back when...better today...enjoy reading your old stuff Sy |
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