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Alicat Member Elite
since 1999-05-23
Posts 4094Coastal Texas 
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Sixty-three eyes stare. Bobby Turner has a big white patch over one where a baseball hit him yesterday that everyone wants to look under, even Bobby. I feel my cheeks burn. Everywhere I look I see eyes. Except when I look at Bobby, then I see one eye and a big white patch. Maybe he has a patch on to keep his eyeball from rolling out of his head onto the floor. Ick. The floor is dusty and tiled and hard. My heels hurt and my palms are wet. Mrs. Bixby clears her throat. It sounds like my Mom trying to drive Dad's car. He calls it a standard. Mom calls it other things. I just said one of those things when I walked in six minutes late to Mrs. Bixby's home room after I looked down and discovered that I had no clothes on. So now sixty three eyes (and a big white patch) stare at me in amazement. I think that something besides a ball hit Bobby. He gets angry and blushes when the other kids ask him. I don't think I will. My Mom is gonna be mad because she has to drive up here in Dad's car to pick me up. I swear I had clothes on when she dropped me off this morning. I'm almost positive. I think I just said another word. Alicat  ------------------ Le Jongleur Aspirante [This message has been edited by Alicat (edited 06-22-99).] |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
this is such a fitting title.... I think..  |
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Sally S. Senior Member
since 1999-06-07
Posts 847Ohio |
hee hee hee hee.... Ok Alicat......You go from one extreme to the next. I love it!!! Still laughing here...I hope this was a nightmare....or a fantasy. Oh my! hee hee.  |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
One never knows what's coming. Cool and refreshing. |
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Mr_Squint Junior Member
since 1999-06-27
Posts 17Bankstown, New South Wales, Australia |
Heh heh heh!!! -> It's great to see another new and original topic that breaks away from the rest! => I loved your poem and wish that you're poetic career will be a long and lasting one!!! ------------------ A mailman was mailing mailmen to other mailmen so these mailmen could mail these mailmen in a mail truck that didn't mail mail but mailed men!!! |
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Starfish Junior Member
since 1999-07-20
Posts 34New Zealand |
This is one of the best narrative poems I have read in a long time. I look forward to reading more of your poems. |
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Saxoness
since 1999-07-18
Posts 1102Texas |
I'm still laughing, great job ------------------ "Glory remains unaware of my neglected dwelling where alone I sing my tearful song which has charms only for me." -Charles Brugnot |
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Alicat Member Elite
since 1999-05-23
Posts 4094Coastal Texas |
Thanks everyone for not only reading and responding, but also for enjoying this one and digging deeps within pages of posts to find it...there's more back there for the intrepid soul who craves adventure.  Alicat |
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Nicole Senior Member
since 1999-06-23
Posts 1835Florida |
Love it!! Want more want more! |
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Munda Member Elite
since 1999-10-08
Posts 3544The Hague, The Netherlands |
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