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poetFemmeFatale
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0 posted 1999-08-27 10:11 AM


When I was finally in your arms -
My spirit rose up to the stars -
Like a bird in blissful flight
And I wanted time to stop.

I could have stood there for forever -
Finally in your arms again -
Like a child safe & warm
And I wanted time to stop.

I didn't want to let you go -
I didn't want to say good-bye
I didn't want to drive away....
But I couldn't make it stop.


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I beckon you to come...I lure you with my tongue... - poet FemmeFatale


© Copyright 1999 Gennifer David - All Rights Reserved
LngJhnAg
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1 posted 1999-08-27 10:40 AM


Femme

A very sweet poem. I liked the way you led me into anticipating the last line of each verse would be the same, and then you closed with the shift.

As for your little saying at the bottom - lured with your tongue? I can never be lured by somebody sticking her tongue out at me! hmmmmph - lol

Sunshine
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2 posted 1999-08-27 01:31 PM


I like this, PFF!

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Sunshine
Words will always express our feelings true. ~~~ KRJ
Look, then, into thine heart, and write ~~~ Henry Wadsworth Longfellow



Michael
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3 posted 1999-08-27 02:18 PM


"And as our tomorrows drift
To reflections of yesterday,
We weekely chase the hands so swift
Of Time slipping away."

Ain't Time the worst enemy a heart ever had?

Michael

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4 posted 1999-08-27 05:53 PM


This was unusual ... :-)~
Balladeer
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5 posted 1999-08-27 06:03 PM


The hands of a clock
Are like hands that are waving goodbye
And, when you're in love,
Every tick of the clock is a sigh.
And so I make this wish,
A wish every heart understands
That, when you're with me,
In our own secret world there will be
A clock without hands

(Johnny Mathis)

Good poem, Femme

IsabelleSkye
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6 posted 1999-08-27 09:53 PM


I really liked this....been there, done that, got the Sweatshirt and etc.. to prove it.
"The clock became a bullet hole
Cruel and unkind.
It hurt me with it's second hand
Alone another night"
~Jewel~

Luv I.Skye

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God is really only another artist. He invented the giraffe, the elephant and the cat. He has no real style, He just goes on trying other things.
- Pablo Picasso

Alwye
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In the space between moments
7 posted 1999-08-27 11:47 PM


Very sweet and beautiful, poetFemmeFatale..I truly enjoyed this.

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*Krista Knutson*

I see the world through the loving eyes of my heart, and suffer the pain of unfulfilled visions. -- Daniel L. Miller



Christopher
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8 posted 1999-08-28 01:24 AM


The tick-tock of the clock is painful,
all sane and logical,
I want to tear it off the wall!
Eve6

Very powerful and concise as usual!

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I believe in the sand beneath my toes.
The beach gives a feeling, an earthly feeling.
I believe in the faith that grows.
-Stephan Jenkins-

Elizabeth
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9 posted 1999-08-28 04:38 PM


Don't we all wish Time could stop? Another gem, PFF.

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*Elizabeth*

"Dwelt a maid belov'd and cherish'd by high and low,
But with autumn leaf she perish'd, long time ago..."

Seaangel
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10 posted 1999-08-28 05:17 PM


Thinking about Time, I guess we're all familiar with the Bard's wonderful sonnets on Time? I've just done an essay on no. 64.
We're all afraid that "Time will come and take my love away, this thought is as a death which cannot choose/ but weep to have that which it fears to lose." I think your poem was beautiful, pFF.

Nan
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11 posted 1999-08-28 07:24 PM


YES!


Tara Simms
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12 posted 1999-08-28 10:12 PM


pff, there are several poets here whose works I make sure to read. you are one of them. keep it up!
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