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I wanted Time to stop...
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I wanted Time to stop... |
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poetFemmeFatale Member Elite
since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646Arkansas 
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When I was finally in your arms - My spirit rose up to the stars - Like a bird in blissful flight And I wanted time to stop. I could have stood there for forever - Finally in your arms again - Like a child safe & warm And I wanted time to stop. I didn't want to let you go - I didn't want to say good-bye I didn't want to drive away.... But I couldn't make it stop. ------------------ I beckon you to come...I lure you with my tongue... - poet FemmeFatale |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
Femme A very sweet poem. I liked the way you led me into anticipating the last line of each verse would be the same, and then you closed with the shift. As for your little saying at the bottom - lured with your tongue? I can never be lured by somebody sticking her tongue out at me! hmmmmph - lol |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I like this, PFF! ------------------ Sunshine Words will always express our feelings true. ~~~ KRJ Look, then, into thine heart, and write ~~~ Henry Wadsworth Longfellow |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
"And as our tomorrows drift To reflections of yesterday, We weekely chase the hands so swift Of Time slipping away." Ain't Time the worst enemy a heart ever had? Michael |
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traveler Member
since 1999-08-17
Posts 119 |
This was unusual ... :-)~ |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
The hands of a clock Are like hands that are waving goodbye And, when you're in love, Every tick of the clock is a sigh. And so I make this wish, A wish every heart understands That, when you're with me, In our own secret world there will be A clock without hands (Johnny Mathis) Good poem, Femme |
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IsabelleSkye Member
since 1999-06-27
Posts 253 |
I really liked this....been there, done that, got the Sweatshirt and etc.. to prove it. "The clock became a bullet hole Cruel and unkind. It hurt me with it's second hand Alone another night" ~Jewel~ Luv I.Skye ------------------ God is really only another artist. He invented the giraffe, the elephant and the cat. He has no real style, He just goes on trying other things. - Pablo Picasso |
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Alwye
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Member Elite
since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
Very sweet and beautiful, poetFemmeFatale..I truly enjoyed this.  ------------------ *Krista Knutson* I see the world through the loving eyes of my heart, and suffer the pain of unfulfilled visions. -- Daniel L. Miller |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
The tick-tock of the clock is painful, all sane and logical, I want to tear it off the wall! Eve6 Very powerful and concise as usual! ------------------ I believe in the sand beneath my toes. The beach gives a feeling, an earthly feeling. I believe in the faith that grows. -Stephan Jenkins- |
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Elizabeth
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Member Ascendant
since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
Don't we all wish Time could stop? Another gem, PFF. ------------------ *Elizabeth* "Dwelt a maid belov'd and cherish'd by high and low, But with autumn leaf she perish'd, long time ago..." |
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Seaangel Member
since 1999-07-27
Posts 167Auckland, New Zealand |
Thinking about Time, I guess we're all familiar with the Bard's wonderful sonnets on Time? I've just done an essay on no. 64. We're all afraid that "Time will come and take my love away, this thought is as a death which cannot choose/ but weep to have that which it fears to lose." I think your poem was beautiful, pFF. |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
YES! |
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Tara Simms Senior Member
since 1999-08-12
Posts 1244Honea Path, SC USA |
pff, there are several poets here whose works I make sure to read. you are one of them. keep it up! |
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