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To Try Again |
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traveler Member
since 1999-08-17
Posts 119 |
written to the one i love ... may she see it here on her next visit ... yes lets try again ...love you still In my life, I stood alone. Content in every way. Going about the things I do, Minutes becoming days. Then one day my life did change; When I met you, friend. As we shared our private thoughts, Old feelings stirred again. So slowly, at first, did we move. Discussing family, life and art. The days did pass, a secret kept, Love growing in my heart. That first day we did kiss, How I prayed you'd found, Showing me such tenderness, A love,to which, you'd be bound. It was then, my heart, I gave to you, My love with each caress; I hoped to know, that your heart was true; To my proposals, you'd say yes. All my love you did reject; When with others you did stray. Oh, all the pain you caused; But, my love, for you, it stays. Yes, I want you now, as before, To be my lover and my friend. Now, I need to know, from you, Shall we try again? [This message has been edited by traveler (edited 08-26-99).] [This message has been edited by traveler (edited 08-27-99).] |
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miriam Member
since 1999-08-26
Posts 323glendale,ca. |
thank you for such beautiful lines. |
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Skyfyre Senior Member
since 1999-08-15
Posts 1906Sitting in Michael's Lap |
Smile ... you remind me of someone ... do I know you ...?  If I do ... my answer is yes ... If not ... oops ... sheepish smile ... Oh yeah ... did I mention the poem is beautiful..? ------------------ "Nunc lento sonitu dicunt, morierus" (Now as I hear this bell tolling softly for another, it says to me, "Thou must die.") |
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pen of passion Member
since 1999-08-11
Posts 234 |
I like a persistent man. I'd say yes again. Nice poem. |
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traveler Member
since 1999-08-17
Posts 119 |
Thank you ... Miriam and Pen, your comments are appreciated by this (rank) amateur. Oh Yeah? ... Hmmm ... well, Nocht, do you ... my mustache is soft ... but I've been known to nip a finger tip or two ... I've edited the poem ... [This message has been edited by traveler (edited 08-27-99).] |
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Skyfyre Senior Member
since 1999-08-15
Posts 1906Sitting in Michael's Lap |
Nipping fingers eh..? Well ... let's just say that if I don't already know you, I want to ... Smile ... Yes let's try again love ------------------ "Nunc lento sonitu dicunt, morierus" (Now as I hear this bell tolling softly for another, it says to me, "Thou must die.") |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
this is sad, hopeful at the end, but none the less sad. Nice writing, though trying again may not be what you really want. Think hard. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
To risk rejection again is hard... good luck! |
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traveler Member
since 1999-08-17
Posts 119 |
Thank you, Passing and Suthern ... rejection is something none of us wants ... nor to try again under the same cirumstances ...it is easier to say, "love like you've never been hurt, dance like no one is watching" then it is to live that way ... i don't live that way ... but i will take a chance ... thanks for your comments [This message has been edited by traveler (edited 08-28-99).] |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
Well, if she don't say yes, then it's her loss. Well done! |
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