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tori Senior Member
since 1999-06-18
Posts 520Mechanicsville, Maryland, USA |
When I go to visit Mother, as she's sitting in her chair I catch her eyes drifting, to the picture sitting there She's lost as time passes, looking into youth Looking at her self, turning off the truth Staring at her self, no more then twenty-one Holding on to Daddy, smiling, having fun Looking back in time is where she seems to run Back to a prefect shape, a young girl having fun I look into her face and see the wrinkles there As thick strands of silver frames her face, and edges her dark hair Her skin always so flawless, has spots of age that show It's thin now, and so fragile, how she bruises so I sometimes see her blue green eyes filling with tears I know because they sparkle and they haven't in many years She say's it just the weather and gently wipes them dry Until a moment passes, and the pictures in her eye Of time gone by she'll tell you, just like yesterday But today she can't remember the last thing that you say All her friends gone now, just her children she has near I wonder if she really knows how much we all do care Tori 99 ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------ If with pen in hand I've made you think I've not wasted one drop of ink vlh. [This message has been edited by tori (edited 08-26-99).] |
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INclan Senior Member
since 1999-07-20
Posts 1024Indiana, USA |
Well done. I like this. Nicely developed and well thoughtout. A few word problems which I took to be typos. Thank you for posting.... Yes, she knows...all mothers do. [This message has been edited by INclan (edited 08-25-99).] |
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DreamEvil Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 2396 |
I'm sure she does Tori. Wonderful tribute to an under appreciated occupation. ------------------ Shall I indulge in flights of fancy hampered by clipped wings? DreamEvil© |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
Damn Tori! I can see your mother through your eyes here.....This was really touching! |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Tori, This one deserves a boost. Well done. |
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tori Senior Member
since 1999-06-18
Posts 520Mechanicsville, Maryland, USA |
Thanks guy's Just a thought on growing old, I'm not.. ever... my adress is never never land.. but just a thought anyway |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
tori: Well done!!! I have an aunt who has lucid moments... but most of the time she's just as likely to think I am my mother and look up expecting to see people who died before I was born. Still, I've no doubt she feels the love... even if the identities of the sources are a bit shaky. *S* |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
Tori This was very touching. And scary. Will those days take us, too? You've written it well. |
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tori Senior Member
since 1999-06-18
Posts 520Mechanicsville, Maryland, USA |
Thanks suthern.. Moms mental state is really pretty good she's 73 and forgetful but still lucid On the other hand I've an uncle who's 86, I'm very close to that has Alzheimer and sometimes it can be rough He lives with his son and my father.. My Father who has been dead for 15 years. Thanks LngJhnAg We never know... I've found it important more so then genealogy to write the story's that have been passed down from the older members of my family.. As well as my own life stories so my children and their children can keep them as hopefully as close to heart as I . |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
this is touching tori let your mother read it she is luck have you |
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tori Senior Member
since 1999-06-18
Posts 520Mechanicsville, Maryland, USA |
Thanks Walt, I will :-) |
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