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Mona Lisa
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since 1999-08-25

Posts 100
Halifax, Nova Scotia

0 posted 1999-08-26 02:20 PM

He lay trapped inside, crying and afraid
his body in pain, his chances outweighed

His pleas for help falling on deaf ears,
no one around to wipe his tears

But through his anguish, his memory travels
while the fate of his destiny slowly unravels

Though his body is weak, his mind remembers
as he struggles to rekindle the dying embers

Of a life once vibrant, now fading to its doom
sealing its fate in a metal tomb

Cut short all at once by a screech and a crash
on his brow, the etchings a fatal gash

Blood spilling ferociously inside and out
his last hopes fading beyond any doubt

If only he had known what lay ahead,
he might have slowed down, and not have sped

But it was too late for regrets, to late for laments
too late to undo this turn of events

His cries for help lay still unheeded,
as the truth of his fate he now conceded

In no time it seemed, his cries for help faded
the last of his strength now spent and abated

Now quiet and still, down a long dark zone
lay the shell of one soul who had died alone.

miriam
Member

since 1999-08-26

Posts 323
glendale,ca.

1 posted 1999-08-26 02:37 PM

i don't understand why no one has responded to your poetry?? I thought it was great. People like poetry that comes from a fantasy world. You're poem is real and it woke me up. Thank you for remindind me that life is precious.

Mona Lisa
Member

since 1999-08-25

Posts 100
Halifax, Nova Scotia

2 posted 1999-08-26 02:42 PM

Wow. Thank you so much for your kind compliments. I am so glad to hear that it had a positive effect on you.

Actually, I just posted this maybe twenty minutes ago as it just came to me out of the blue

Pepper
Member Elite

since 1999-08-19

Posts 3079
Southern Florida

3 posted 1999-08-26 02:43 PM

extraordinary!

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Shannon

miriam
Member

since 1999-08-26

Posts 323
glendale,ca.

4 posted 1999-08-26 02:44 PM

i didn't even check the date in your poem. I think that destiny put this poem in my path. you have a gift.

Mona Lisa
Member

since 1999-08-25

Posts 100
Halifax, Nova Scotia

5 posted 1999-08-26 02:47 PM

If you could see me right now.....Im flushing at your comments. Thank you : )

miriam
Member

since 1999-08-26

Posts 323
glendale,ca.

6 posted 1999-08-26 02:50 PM

it never hurts to make a heart smile.

Mona Lisa
Member

since 1999-08-25

Posts 100
Halifax, Nova Scotia

7 posted 1999-08-26 06:01 PM

Thank you again.

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