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Seymour Tabin
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since 1999-07-07

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Tamarac Fla

0 posted 1999-08-23 05:25 PM

The silent door

Each night in ghost I beat her door
The beats resound but nothing more.

A fatal blow my fleur-de-lis
My joie-de vivre that came to be.

My church my spire and my shrine
God took back what I thought was mine.

Swallowed like a sip of tea
Her substance to eternity.

And only echoes' soar encore
Faint knocks upon the astral door.

caroline
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since 1999-08-16

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1 posted 1999-08-23 08:04 PM

Simply marvelous...you are very talented.

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Nan

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Member Seraphic

since 1999-05-20

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2 posted 1999-08-23 08:35 PM

tres bien, mon ami.....

Seymour Tabin
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since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

3 posted 1999-08-23 11:09 PM

Caroline and Nan,
thank you for the read and flattering comments

Delores Hall
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since 1999-07-16

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4 posted 1999-08-23 11:55 PM

Enjoyed your poem.Happy writing.

Seymour Tabin
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since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

5 posted 1999-08-24 12:17 PM

Delores,
I thank you too.
To read the comments are the highlight
of my day.

Sunshine

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6 posted 1999-08-24 12:22 PM

Seymour, explain one thing to me. How am I to perceive "in ghost I beat her door"? Are you both dead? Or just she? Please, please, explain to me.

Very unearthly. Good work!

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Sunshine
Words will always express our feelings true. ~~~ KRJ
Look, then, into thine heart, and write ~~~ Henry Wadsworth Longfellow

Seymour Tabin
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since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

7 posted 1999-08-24 12:37 PM

Dear Sunshine,
It's the ghost within my mind.
I have some jolly ghosts too. *L*

Sunshine

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8 posted 1999-08-24 01:19 PM

Let those jolly ghosts out, Seymour, October is leafing up on us.

BTW, I especially liked

"Swallowed like a sip of tea
Her substance to eternity"

I think this piece is growing on me.

aziza
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since 2006-07-09

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9 posted 2007-07-01 10:38 PM

This remains lovely years later

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Artic Wind
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10 posted 2007-11-10 09:46 PM

Enjoyed

ARCTIC WIND

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