Exodus from paradise ( A villanelle )

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Exodus from paradise ( A villanelle )

Seymour Tabin
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since 1999-07-07

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Tamarac Fla

0 posted 1999-08-12 02:58 PM

Exodus from paradise ( A villanelle)

Curiosity exploits naivete
By an innocent stroll and a prying goal,
Where the snake of temptation rises in play.

Where confusion can turn the mind to souffle
And our sense and patience emigre control
Curiosity exploits naivete.

While temperance and license lie down by the way
The light of a goal loses sight of the soul,
Where the snake of temptation rises in play.

To reach a green bay and to sail Mandaly
Our sails must glean and stay a better enroll
Curiosity exploits naivete.

For death's constant shadow shows full every way
And only cajole dances round the maypole,
Where the snake of temptation raises in play.

The dye to paradise must apply each day
In our stroll in our goal in our whole and dole
Curiosity exploits naivete,
Where the snake of temptation rises in play.

Seymour Tabin
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since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

1 posted 1999-08-12 11:38 PM

Sorry no one like this villanelle.

Balladeer

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since 1999-06-05

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Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA

2 posted 1999-08-13 12:42 PM

Me, Sy!! I do! Any attempt at a villanelle deserves appreciation and this one does have good qualities.

Seymour Tabin
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since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

3 posted 1999-08-13 07:47 AM

Thank you Balladeer, well you can't win them all.

Drauntz
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since 2007-03-16

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Los Angeles California

4 posted 2007-06-20 06:58 PM

It is good sir.. and good warning too. and good poem too.

enjoyed

Artic Wind
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since 2007-09-16

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Realm of Supernatural

5 posted 2007-11-10 09:45 PM

enjoyed

ARCTIC WIND

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