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DreamEvil
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since 1999-06-22
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0 posted 1999-08-20 09:43 AM


Deep within my heart I hold few secrets.
Those I have I cherish too much to tell.
I have two that simply gnaw at my soul.
I've tried forgetting them in every way.
Both are reasons for me writing so Dark.
Writing verse is my escape from the pain.

It seems the best way to write is from pain.
Perhaps that is why I hold my secrets.
Maybe that's why I hold on to the Dark.
What drew me to evil I just can't tell.
I know others follow a different way.
I can't face the light just to save my soul.

I am resigned to being an old soul.
It helps me cope when I share a friend's pain.
Most don't understand why I am this way.
I can't respond and still hold my secrets.
My story though they will want me to tell.
All this interest makes me long for the Dark.

Every life begins and ends in the Dark.
The lack of light comforts my tortured soul.
That fact is something I can choose to tell.
It is one truth that causes me no pain.
My heart is maimed by some of my secrets.
Lies hurt me in exactly the same way.

I wonder if others have felt this way.
I'm not lonely just alone in the Dark.
Such is the price paid for keeping secrets.
I long to confide in a single soul.
Doing so would only cause me more pain.
I could never trust the one I chose to tell.

There are many friends I would like to tell.
My fears seem to always get in the way.
I truly want a release from my pain.
That is why my poetry is so Dark.
It bares to the world my tormented soul.
Verse lessens the burden of my secrets.

I can't really tell how I found the Dark.
I have found a way to brighten my soul.
I embrace the pain caused by my secrets.


©1999 DreamEvil

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Shall I indulge in flights of fancy hampered by clipped wings?
DreamEvil©


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WhtDove
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since 1999-07-22
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1 posted 1999-08-20 10:03 AM


This was beautifully written! Sad, but a job well done. You have expressed yourself very well. It tares at my heartstrings!!!!!!!
tori
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since 1999-06-18
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Mechanicsville, Maryland, USA
2 posted 1999-08-20 10:07 AM


I told you!!! ... This is truly great... you put your heart in here and it show's...Bravo my friend Bravo :-)

She is thinking..!!!!
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If with pen in hand I've made you think
I've not wasted one drop of ink
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LngJhnAg
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since 1999-07-23
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3 posted 1999-08-20 10:08 AM


Dreamer

ack!!!! That is one complicated style! Geesh - you handled it well! Toio, well. I think I'll switch over to writing naughty novels...

ooooo.... ahhhhhh..... YES......YES.....OMG....OMG....erk..... ERK?


Yep - I think I can write in that style pretty well. Whatta ya think? Should Nora Roberts move over?

Dragoness
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since 1999-08-07
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4 posted 1999-08-20 12:24 PM


WOW!Very Deep and moving!

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Set you heart free and your mind will follow.

Gentle Soul
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since 1999-07-12
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5 posted 1999-08-20 02:37 PM


I love this, this explains a lot, and its beautiful.. Dream, you did it again love,.. you amaze me! *hugs to my big brother*

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Rita
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since 1999-07-19
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Danville Va. 24540
6 posted 1999-08-21 01:14 AM


very deeply written. shows how much 1 can take and still survive, one of life's greatest achievements.

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"And the day came, where the risk to remain tight in a bud, was more painful than the risk it took to blossom"

Alwye
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In the space between moments
7 posted 1999-08-21 01:28 AM


Yes, very deep. You tug at my heartstrings as well...perhaps because I can relate so well. Yes, others have felt this way, Dream. Wonderfully written.

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*Krista Knutson*

"If I could be an angel, I'd make your every wish come true. But I am only human, just a woman lovin' you..." Trisha Yearwood


~one voice~
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since 1999-07-08
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Billings, MT USA
8 posted 1999-08-21 05:53 AM


Dream, you did extremely well with this. I could feel it. Really feel it. I don't know how to explain that...

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~onevoice~

"She looked at her life
like lines, never-ending,
constantly forming,
reforming and bending."



pen of passion
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9 posted 1999-08-21 11:40 AM


Oh, Evil, you have such a way with words. You know sharing secrets saddens another's soul.
DreamEvil
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10 posted 1999-08-21 11:27 PM


This form seems to well fit the subject of this piece. Thank you.
IsabelleSkye
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since 1999-06-27
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11 posted 1999-08-22 01:27 AM


this is very nice

I applaud your freedom in embracing new styles of writing..it inspires me
Luv Izzy

Nan
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since 1999-05-20
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12 posted 1999-08-23 06:35 PM


Looks pretty good to me, DE.....
bleeding heart
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since 1999-08-23
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13 posted 1999-08-23 07:02 PM


Very well written. I think.

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I lay here waiting with my bleeding heart.

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