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DreamEvil Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 2396 |
What gentle deceit does our passion prove? Our song seems to be a dirge or lament. We greet each other passionless and spent. For you see, my heart you no longer move. Why speak when I know you won't approve? I have already endured your torment. Your leaving me truly seems heaven sent. Without you my life can only improve. These words of mine were terrible to write. Each of these things I felt a need to say. I truly think my voice will go unheard. Please don't think this was written out of spite. It really wasn't meant to sound that way. Something compelled me to write every word. ©1999 DreamEvil ------------------ Shall I indulge in flights of fancy hampered by clipped wings? DreamEvil© [This message has been edited by DreamEvil (edited 08-19-99).] |
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Nicole Senior Member
since 1999-06-23
Posts 1835Florida |
Definately something to say for closure! Simply put, and well said. ------------------ "Grief can take care of itself, but to get the full value of joy you must have somebody to divide it with." *Mark Twain* |
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Dragoness Senior Member
since 1999-08-07
Posts 513 |
I liked this one!  ------------------ Set you heart free and your mind will follow. |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
Dreamie - Is this a named style? I liked the way you slipped from one into the other, as if you were talking to someone, and then reflecting on what you said afterwards. |
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Gentle Soul Member
since 1999-07-12
Posts 273Vinton,Ohio USA |
wow love, this is great... ------------------ Gënt£ë¤§°û£ |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
Today I can relate to this one! My voice does seem to go unheard! |
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DreamEvil Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 2396 |
In truth, this is about the love I felt for the darkest part of my nature. |
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~one voice~ Senior Member
since 1999-07-08
Posts 664Billings, MT USA |
There comes a time in our lives when we all must say goodbye to a part of ourselves. Some have an easier time with it than others. You bring beauty to that part that will be gone forever, for we can never truly go back to being who we once were. ------------------ ~onevoice~ "She looked at her life like lines, never-ending, constantly forming, reforming and bending." |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Nice Petrarchan (Italian) Sonnet format.... Darn - You always write on the dark side, ya know???? |
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DreamEvil Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 2396 |
Thanks be to all that replied. It's true that I can't go back which is why I said Goodbye, wistfully but Goodbye nonetheless. Nan, I write Dark because that is mostly all I know. I've had few pleasant experiences in life compared to the number that cause me pain. I will try to write a lighter piece once I perfect each format, just for you. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
DreamEvil, A grey goodbye But nicely done. |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
The other day, someone brought one of your first postings up to the top of the heap. I read it again and saw that you have grown as a poet and a person since you first arrived. It seems to me that you have gotten better - you certainly are trying more styles! It shows that you care about your craft and it's presentation. Congratulations! (I liked this poem and hope your goodbye to that darker side of you is not too painful).  |
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DreamEvil Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 2396 |
Now that, Lady deVine, is quite a compliment. I hope I continue to live up to it. |
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Rita Member
since 1999-07-19
Posts 55Danville Va. 24540 |
i know how hard it is to spill your heart to a loved one whos heart is hardened and just turns away. ------------------ "And the day came, where the risk to remain tight in a bud, was more painful than the risk it took to blossom" |
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