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The Other Lover |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA 
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My wife is having an affair. The evidence is everywhere. Her face is rosy with delight. A smile upturns her lips at night. A special twinkle in her eye I spot, as she goes passing by. Her thoughts, a million miles away, She barely hears a word I say. Though I am crushed, I cannot claim To not know wherein lies the blame. There was a time, long years ago, That I was quite the Romeo. I brought her flowers every day. I smiled at what she had to say. I always tried to make her see The happy man she let me be. I made her laugh with silly quips And took her on romantic trips That made her squeal with delight. I held her to me every night. But, as the years passed frantically, Romance came not so easily. The mounting pressures of my life - The work, the bills - no time for wife. Bouquets delivered less and less As did the times of tenderness; My smile appeared less frequently And changed the man that once was me. Now I can see, she has another Man to be a better lover. Though I still play a vital part, He is the one inside her heart. She loves another man, and yet, I sadly feel no regret. Her other lover is, you see, The husband that I used to be. |
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elvira Senior Member
since 1999-07-06
Posts 936California |
a lovely ending...if only everyone had such a split personality  |
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moonmoon Member
since 1999-08-13
Posts 277TX , USA |
Sir, That was AWESOME..I am starting to wonder if the end has a 'hidden' twist to it.. ------------------ "No one was ever ruined from without; The final ruin comes from within." Amelia E. Barr |
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Artur Hawkwing Member
since 1999-06-30
Posts 444USA |
Balladeer- I hope this never happens to me. Masterful writing, as usual. |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
ooohhh, cold shivers up the spine. Of course it was wonderful Balladeer. I was completely prepared to tell you to go beat that other guy's buttt, but then... Wow as usual with you! Thank you for letting us read that! ------------------ It's so cool, it's so swell, living here on Ice Planet hell! -Psychotica- |
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Cinderella Member
since 1999-06-23
Posts 152Arizona |
So glad you were Romeo! |
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caroline Senior Member
since 1999-08-16
Posts 1218http://members.xoom.com/belladona123/index.htm |
Cleverly done, with a great twist on an interesting topic. Enjoyed the read. ------------------ The only man worth your tears will never make you cry... |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Of course she's still in love with you! She snuck into your study at night and read the lovely poem about her snoring! That probably saved the marriage! This is wonderful - your gift shows each day, my friend.  |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
Well done Balladeer....so what you're saying is that she discovered even old dogs can still bury a bone huh?....I told ya that Viagra would work....I haven't had the need to experiment with it yet, but LongJohn tells me it's done wonders for him? |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
Well done my friend! I don't know why that happens, I think it does to all. After the years the thrill of the chase is gone. I have been there. I truly admire your writing. |
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Lost Dreamer Member Elite
since 1999-06-20
Posts 2464Somewhere near the Rainbow |
Sir Balladeer, I sit here amazed once again, your abilities are endless, as we all can see. I admire your ability to send us down dirt roads that lead to highways of your imagination. |
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JP Senior Member
since 1999-05-25
Posts 1343Loomis, CA |
Hauntingly beautiful. ------------------ Yesterday is ash, tomorrow is smoke; only today does the fire burn. JP |
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poetFemmeFatale Member Elite
since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646Arkansas |
Lost Dreamer said it all - - every piece of yours is a fabulous journey into a far off land of enchantment, comedy, or mystery !! You never know what you're gonna get when you pick an apple from sir Balladeer's tree!!! Maybe even a little worm ! he he he (that wasn't an insult or anything, I have no idea how big your worm is - no wait, on the other hand, I DO - I have a few snapshots I could dig out !) LOL Just kidding, don't panic......these people don't have the amount of money it would take before I'd show those, darling.......HA JUST ONE BIG JOKE EVRYBODY!!!! Bye now....***blowing kisses ------------------ - poet FemmeFatale "The strongest man in the world is he who stands most alone..." Henrik Ibsen (1826-1906) Norwegian dramatist lyric poet |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
'Deer Interesting enough, my friend, The lover who your wife once knew, Can be her lover once again, The choice is left to you. |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
All I can say is wow. This one took my by total surprize. Great work and a very interesting perception. Michael |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Balladeer, A masterpiece of rejection. Could'nt be better. Loved it. |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
My thanks to you all. It is rewarding creating poems that people can relate to. Toe...you haven't had a chance to use it because you need a partner first! Poet Femme...What a trip you are!!! |
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pen of passion Member
since 1999-08-11
Posts 234 |
You're so inspiringly prolific. |
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Sally S. Senior Member
since 1999-06-07
Posts 847Ohio |
You know, you promised never to write a poem about me. OH, this wasn't about me..and I'm not your wife. Huh, must have been a dream of some sort!! My goodness, I'm sleepy..zzzzzzz Going to bed now my deer. I truly hold great admiration for you. (((HUGS))) |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Ditto, ditto, etc. etc. ------------------ Sunshine Words will always express our feelings true. ~~~ KRJ Look, then, into thine heart, and write ~~~ Henry Wadsworth Longfellow |
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sea_of_okc Senior Member
since 1999-06-15
Posts 568Oklahoma City, OK, USA |
Only a man long married could write such a poem. Excellently done as usual my friend. It is a sad truth that most marriages suffer such a letdown of passion as the burdens of surviving in this world weight us down. Thank you for your insightfulness, you inspire me to do better and never let my next marriage come to such a state. Hmmm, of course I am assuming I can find a woman crazy enuff to marry me!!! |
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tori Senior Member
since 1999-06-18
Posts 520Mechanicsville, Maryland, USA |
Once was.. what is to be... in life as in the poets pen.... you have again given us this gift into the real world so vivid so wonderfuly done. the understanding of the years... congrats and thanks... :-) ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------ If with pen in hand I've made you think I've not wasted one drop of ink vlh. |
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aziza Member Elite
since 2006-07-09
Posts 2995Lumpy Oatmeal makes me Crazy! |
This is beautiful so beautiful A |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
Enjoyed ARCTIC WIND |
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latearrival Member Ascendant
since 2003-03-21
Posts 5499Florida |
This was always one of my favorites. latearrival/jo |
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