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poohbear Junior Member
since 1999-08-02
Posts 42piedmont,sc |
If I were a wall... I'd fall down around you and build you a home where you can be safe and warm I'd keep out the cold yes I'd be your shelter If I were a wall If I were a storm... I'd gently pass over and send down my rain sweet rain to comfort your tears I'd fade till the sun could shine down upon you If I were a storm If I were a garden... I'd bring many beautiful things into your world I'd freshen your days with my aroma I'd soften your walk with my petals I'd brighten your life with my many colors If I were a garden If I were a kiss.... I'd seal every promise and follow the soft sweet scent from your lips I'd comfort your lips and I would hold them if only for a moment If I were a kiss If I were a prayer... I would rise without ceasing lifting you higher with every breath that I take I'd cover your sorrows with only a whisper If I were a prayer If I were..... [This message has been edited by poohbear (edited 08-16-99).] |
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poetFemmeFatale Member Elite
since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646Arkansas |
Very nice idea - someone must be in love !! (wink) You only write mush like this when you're in LOVE! ........sigh ------------------ - poet FemmeFatale "The strongest man in the world is he who stands most alone..." Henrik Ibsen (1826-1906) Norwegian dramatist lyric poet |
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elvira Senior Member
since 1999-07-06
Posts 936California |
mushy? perhaps...but an enjoyable read nonetheless  you might want to re-read it for a spell/grammar check, no offense |
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moonmoon Member
since 1999-08-13
Posts 277TX , USA |
Well done...It flowed right through.. ------------------ "No one was ever ruined from without; The final ruin comes from within." Amelia E. Barr |
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caroline Senior Member
since 1999-08-16
Posts 1218http://members.xoom.com/belladona123/index.htm |
this is lovely...nice flow and sweet imagery. ------------------ The only man worth your tears will never make you cry... |
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poohbear Junior Member
since 1999-08-02
Posts 42piedmont,sc |
femme: in love ??? perhaps. thaks for the compliments, all glad you enjoyed it. hope it wasnt too mushy for you all. |
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Alwye
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since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
Definitely not too mushy...I love this sort of stuff these days...beautiful, with excellent imagery!  ------------------ *Krista Knutson* "If I could be an angel, I'd make your every wish come true. But I am only human, just a woman lovin' you..." Trisha Yearwood |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
'Tis well done. I loved how you did this. Sweet emotions! |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Lovely, lovely, lovely! |
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wordweaver Junior Member
since 1999-08-19
Posts 25south carolina |
thanks alwye, whtdove and severn glad you enjoyed it, still kind of new at this thing, your compliments are the fuel i need for inspiration. by the way note the name change, I was Poohbear, thought it was more appropriate [This message has been edited by wordweaver (edited 08-20-99).] |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Poohbear, I like mush and that was a good serving. |
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wordweaver Junior Member
since 1999-08-19
Posts 25south carolina |
thanks seymour glad you enjoyed it. thi was indeed written for a very special lady |
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