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Ominous Member
since 1999-07-04
Posts 68Canada |
It stretched across the land, as far as the eye could see. I knew almost quite instantly, this wonder was for me. I sat and watched this wonder, in a silent reverie. It's crossed my path many times before, but I've never REALLY seen. I sat and watched it as the sun went down, till I could see no more. Then with silent regrets, I headed towards the door. I crawled into bed, wrapped within a strange daze. And as I slipped into unconciousness, my soul began to raise. The fog crept across the threshold, and silently under my door. It danced with my soul in the moonlight, like something from days of lore. They danced all night long, illuminated by the moon. They held each other tight, not wanting to let go so soon. But it's mission had been accomplished, it's job had been done. And so it crept across the threshold once more, and under the rising sun. My soul lingered a moment more, before it crept back to me. Where it bathed in a comforting silence, in joy it's never seen. The next morning I awoke, my mind as bright as dawn. I stepped out to bask in my wonder. Only to find that it was gone. It left me in the night, without a whisper or goodbye. Gone to some other sad soul, to heal it, as it did mine. ------------------ I am but a shadow, lost within this world of darkness |
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poetFemmeFatale Member Elite
since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646Arkansas |
Very nice, it made me feel a bit spooky though...quite cool I must say! ------------------ - poet FemmeFatale "The strongest man in the world is he who stands most alone..." Henrik Ibsen (1826-1906) Norwegian dramatist lyric poet |
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moonmoon Member
since 1999-08-13
Posts 277TX , USA |
A good piece Ominous...It brought out a strange sense in me that lingered.. ( I am sure thats what you intended to do..)  ------------------ "No one was ever ruined from without; The final ruin comes from within." Amelia E. Barr |
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Ominous Member
since 1999-07-04
Posts 68Canada |
Thank you both of you. It feels good that I have accomplished what I set out to do in this piece. |
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Alwye
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Member Elite
since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
Yes, very nicely done..it also gave me a bit of a spooky feeling. ------------------ *Krista Knutson* "If I could be an angel, I'd make your every wish come true. But I am only human, just a woman lovin' you..." Trisha Yearwood |
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Ominous Member
since 1999-07-04
Posts 68Canada |
I thank you deeply. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
This made me feel as I did when I watched "Meet Joe Black". That movie stayed with me for several days, and when I consciously think of it, I'm taken back to that feeling. Now, your poem has gone and done the same thing. Well done, Ominous. ------------------ Sunshine Words will always express our feelings true. ~~~ KRJ Look, then, into thine heart, and write ~~~ Henry Wadsworth Longfellow |
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Elizabeth
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Member Ascendant
since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
I enjoyed this piece a lot, Ominous! I could see the soul and the mist dancing. ------------------ *Elizabeth* "Dwelt a maid belov'd and cherish'd by high and low, But with autumn leaf she perish'd, long time ago..." |
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DreamEvil Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 2396 |
This piece well lives up to your name, Ominous. ------------------ Shall I indulge in flights of fancy hampered by clipped wings? DreamEvil© |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Very good. I like the idea of your soul dancing around the room at night. Did you ever see John Carpenter's 'The Fog'? This reminds me of that movie. |
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Blush Member
since 2002-08-31
Posts 56Ky |
Hmm i read this twice I got a somewhat eretheral,calming feeling about it the first read i got was sorta errie and spooky but the second read was entirely different I liked it....Nice to read before going to bed! Thanks for sharing Blush |
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